The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meal

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The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:

Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.

The letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal has the following fallacies. First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is compromising on healthy food habits based on the children's review while it is the adult's responsibility to decide on it. Second fallacy, the parent's suggestion that changing the vendor would be the only solution to go about is disagreeable. Third fallacy, the letter doesn't mention any information on children who are not from the son's group of friends.

First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is compromising on healthy food habits based on the children's review while it is the adult's responsibility to decide on it. It is the responsibility of the parents and schools to provide healthy food to children and that responsibility should not be compromised because the children are not finding it tasty.

Second fallacy, the parent's suggestion that changing the vendor would be the only solution to go about is disagreeable. While changing the vendor seems to be a viable option it is also necessary to provide feedback to them so that the vendor makes the healthy food more tasty. After which the parent can again assess whether the vendor should be removed or not.

Third fallacy, the letter doesn't mention any information on children who are not from the son's group of friends. It is important that the parent should have provided information regarding other children and provided a joint consensus that the vendor's food is not found to be tasty by most children in the school.

Therefore, if the parent avoids the above fallacies by not compromising her authority on what kind of food should be given, providing more than one solution to the problem and finally providing information on other children who like or dislike the vendor's food, then the letter would have had a stronger stance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'infer'
Suggestion: infer
...lowing fallacies. First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is comp...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...on the childrens review while it is the adults responsibility to decide on it. Second ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...ty to decide on it. Second fallacy, the parents suggestion that changing the vendor wou...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...disagreeable. Third fallacy, the letter doesnt mention any information on children who...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'infer'
Suggestion: infer
... of friends. First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is comp...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...on the childrens review while it is the adults responsibility to decide on it. It is t...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...ding it tasty. Second fallacy, the parents suggestion that changing the vendor wou...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... or not. Third fallacy, the letter doesnt mention any information on children who...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 244, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'vendors'' or 'vendor's'?
Suggestion: vendors'; vendor's
...and provided a joint consensus that the vendors food is not found to be tasty by most c...
^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 249, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'vendors'' or 'vendor's'?
Suggestion: vendors'; vendor's
... other children who like or dislike the vendors food, then the letter would have had a ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, third, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00630914826 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7299444686 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.378548895899 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1294898993 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.25 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15203723998 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087593850394 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10062522972 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997215023247 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605682335382 0.0628817314937 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Sentence: First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is compromising on healthy food habits based on the children's review while it is the adult's responsibility to decide on it.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and inferred

Sentence: First fallacy, it can inferred from the letter that the parent is compromising on healthy food habits based on the children's review while it is the adult's responsibility to decide on it.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and inferred

Sentence: It is the responsibility of the parents and schools to provide healthy food to children and that responsibility should not be compromised because the children are not finding it tasty.
Description: The fragment it tasty . is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace tasty with adverb

Sentence: Therefore, if the parent avoids the above fallacies by not compromising her authority on what kind of food should be given, providing more than one solution to the problem and finally providing information on other children who like or dislike the vendor's food, then the letter would have had a stronger stance.
Description: The word had is not usually used as a verb 'to have', past participle
Suggestion: Refer to had

Sentence: Third fallacy, the letter doesn't mention any information on children who are not from the son's group of friends.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does

Sentence: It is the responsibility of the parents and schools to provide healthy food to children and that responsibility should not be compromised because the children are not finding it tasty.
Error: tasty Suggestion: taste

Sentence: While changing the vendor seems to be a viable option it is also necessary to provide feedback to them so that the vendor makes the healthy food more tasty.
Error: tasty Suggestion: taste

Sentence: Third fallacy, the letter doesn't mention any information on children who are not from the son's group of friends.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does

Sentence: It is important that the parent should have provided information regarding other children and provided a joint consensus that the vendor's food is not found to be tasty by most children in the school.
Error: tasty Suggestion: taste

Sentence: Therefore, if the parent avoids the above fallacies by not compromising her authority on what kind of food should be given, providing more than one solution to the problem and finally providing information on other children who like or dislike the vendor's food, then the letter would have had a stronger stance.
Error: stance Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1552 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.865 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.02 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.48 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.697 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5