Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument states that the pirouttes ballet school is the best school for any child. The author draw this conclusion based on the intensive dance program of school, experience of teachers and the success of alumni of the school. However, before this recommendation is evaluated, the author has to provide information for three questions.
First of all, is the ballet school appropriate for any child? In other words, whether the ballet school is appropriate for a student who do not like ballet but is interested in other dance form? it may be possible that the child joined in the school may not be interested in the ballet. then the credibility of the school lies in providing the child with a program that interests him. if the above is true, the argument of pirouttes ballet school is the best school for any child does not hold water.
Secondly, are all the programs of dance schools in the Elm town comparable? it may happen that one of the schools have best teachers for a particular dance form and in other dance form, they may be poorer. Consequently, the question of basis for comparison arises. Further, it may also happen that the Elmtown is having very less dance schools when compared to near towns. perhaps, if that is the case, then the argument of proposing the Pirouettus ballet school as the best school is weakened.
Further, are teachers of the school who have performed in many companies capable of teaching to the students? teaching some one is very different from winning on oneself. teaching requires many attributes and virtues. A great performer may not become a great teacher. In continuation, it is also mentioned that the previous students from the school have become professional dancers. it may so happen, that the students from the school have attended some professional classes after the school or they have some special attributes that have made them very reputed. if the either of scenarios hold true, then the conclusion drawn will be weakened.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to it's reliance on the unwarranted evidences. if author can answer the above questions and offer more evidence (perhaps with a proper research) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation that the pirouttes ballet school id the best school for any child.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1915 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.664 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'draws'.
Suggestion: draws
...e best school for any child. The author draw this conclusion based on the intensive ...
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Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... but is interested in other dance form? it may be possible that the child joined i...
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Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...ol may not be interested in the ballet. then the credibility of the school lies in p...
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Line 7, column 386, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...hild with a program that interests him. if the above is true, the argument of piro...
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Line 13, column 77, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...nce schools in the Elm town comparable? it may happen that one of the schools have...
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Line 13, column 115, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the best'.
Suggestion: have the best
...? it may happen that one of the schools have best teachers for a particular dance form an...
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Line 13, column 374, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...ce schools when compared to near towns. perhaps, if that is the case, then the argument...
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Line 19, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Teaching
...es capable of teaching to the students? teaching some one is very different from winning...
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Line 19, column 120, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...e of teaching to the students? teaching some one is very different from winning on onese...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Teaching
...very different from winning on oneself. teaching requires many attributes and virtues. A...
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Suggestion: It
...chool have become professional dancers. it may so happen, that the students from t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...butes that have made them very reputed. if the either of scenarios hold true, then...
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Line 25, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ds now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on the unwarranted evidences. ...
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Line 25, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...siderably flawed due to its reliance on the unwarranted evidences. if author can...
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Line 25, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...reliance on the unwarranted evidences. if author can answer the above questions a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as to, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01259445844 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68805518316 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443324937028 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1285812205 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4545454545 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0454545455 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388117859066 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13030570968 0.0743258471296 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910271309498 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232140763026 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740792337412 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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