Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
mass media and the internet in today's world hold a great effect on the people perspective of thinking. The prompt recommends that the mass media and internet have decreased the time of people attention, which on other hand bolstered people to sort out for the important information with an overall positive effect. In my opinion, I disagree with the suggestion and argue that the media and internet has adverse effects on people thinking and understanding.
To begin, the authenticity of media and internet is questionable. In other words, the news presented by media and internet have the biased political or analytical thinking depending on the organisation that is publishing the news. For instance, in 2010 during the presidential election in United States, the google was accused for being biased. The google searches have resulted in the information providing against one of the candidate, thus polarizing the judgement of people. The above example illustrates that the authenticity of the information providers which is unknown will have an adverse effect over one's perspective. thus the mass media and the internet have negative effects.
Further, the mass media and internet today is seen as a profit making business Every television channel's motive is to increase the vieweship. Consequently, many channels are providing information that may be irrelevant or not useful. The debates conducted are of more cacophonous rather than information providing. Much of the information like environmental changes, economic changes have been supplanted by the money producing biased information like celebrity scandals, religious fights etc. thus the media with a motive of money making is exacerbating the credibility and the relevancy of the news telecasted.
Of course some argue that the information provided by the media or internet is helpful and educating. Yes, the media and internet can be a great medium to exchange the information. The information can be seen in positive way, depending upon the credibility of the news provider. thus, it can be seen taht the moral ethics and some stringnet rules on the news providers may yeild advantages, but as of today the medaia and internet are adversely effecting the peeple.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, may, so, then, thus, for instance, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 33.0505617978 27% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39772727273 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98134561588 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491477272727 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0473351719 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.555555556 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243426600803 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849522652949 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067841782846 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160318133358 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0971147786611 0.0667264976115 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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