A pet food company recalled 4 million pounds of pet food in response to complaints that pets that had consumed the food experienced vomiting, lethargy, and other signs of illness. After the recall, the pet food company tested samples from the recalled food and determined that all chemicals found in the food were chemicals that are approved for use in pet food. Thus, the recalled food was not responsible for these symptoms, and the company should not devote further resources to the investigation.
The memorandum states that the company should stop the investigation on the recalled pet food that was thought to cause illness in the pets. The conclusion is based on the research conducted on the food samples. but, the result from the research conducted is not strong and require more facts for their authenticity.
Firstly, it is stated that the company has researched on the pet food. Here, the authenticity of the company to do research is questionable. The research conducted in company may yield the different results, but the company for its benefits may have over thrown the results. The research shall be conducted or witnessed by some authorized agencies to prove its validity. Hence conclusion drawing on the research done by non authentic or own company may not be valid.
Further, it is mentioned that the chemicals found in the food samples are approved for use in the pet foods. The individual chemicals found in samples may be approved for use, but the combined agglomerated usage of all these chemicals may be harmful. it may also happen that the research is conducted in constrained conditions whose usage in normal conditions may be harmful. The pet food will be normally used after many days of preservation with packing. The research has to consider the preservation time with a type of packing in the sample testing. Thus to consider the research results, the company has to check the above details during the research.
In continuation, the research has to be done on all the type of pets. it may so happen, that the pet food may be harmful to one type of pet but may be valid to other type of pet. In statement it is mentioned that the pets that were fed with this food are found ill. The company has to check the common observation in all these pets and shall base their research on whether this type of pet food is harmful to specific type of food. The company has to test and prove the validity of pet food on all pets and provide a conclusion rather than drawing a conclusion on showing that the constitutes of pet food are approved ones for pet food.
With all these ideas the company conclusion to stop the investigation on recalled pet food based on the research conducted on the food samples is flawed and require much research for validity. The company may provide the data on the validity of pet food on different types of pet, the pet food as a complete pack is healthy for pets. The company also has to conduct research in different situations like considering preservation time, packing conditions etc. under an authorized agency. With all the results from above stated conditions,the company has to take a decision on the pet food.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2166 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.638 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.612 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.585 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...research conducted on the food samples. but, the result from the research conducted...
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Line 7, column 372, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...horized agencies to prove its validity. Hence conclusion drawing on the research done...
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Line 13, column 252, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... of all these chemicals may be harmful. it may also happen that the research is co...
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Line 13, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e harmful. The pet food will be normally used after many days of preservation wit...
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Line 13, column 558, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... type of packing in the sample testing. Thus to consider the research results, the c...
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Line 19, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...has to be done on all the type of pets. it may so happen, that the pet food may be...
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Line 19, column 582, Rule ID: CONSTITUTES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consists of'?
Suggestion: consists of
...rawing a conclusion on showing that the constitutes of pet food are approved ones for pet food...
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Line 25, column 460, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Under
...servation time, packing conditions etc. under an authorized agency. With all the resu...
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Line 25, column 537, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...the results from above stated conditions,the company has to take a decision on the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80042918455 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68651444633 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.3669527897 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7159183032 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2083333333 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408236506123 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155191663045 0.0743258471296 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146187207703 0.0701772020484 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279738046864 0.128457276422 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12781272657 0.0628817314937 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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