The memo from the advertisind directiore of the Super Screen movie Production Company suggested that they should invest more into the advertising in the following year. He claimed that although fewer people attended their movies in the past year, positive movie reviews' percentage was higher for some movies. His claim, if not substantiated, dramatically weakens the argument of the prompt. Hence these following questions must be addressed.
Firstly, what is the amount of Super Screen's budget that had already been allocated in advertising? The advertising director mentioned that the problem could be solved by engaging more money in his department. However, the current advertising budget is nowehere mentioned. If the current budget is appropriate then there is no need to add more to it. It would be fruitless instead. The extra budget can be uselful in other departments where it is actually needed. Thus the production quality can be improved too.
Secondly, doesn't fewer audience also mean they are not interested in the content they are producing? The opponent said that some of the movies got positive reviews that implies many of them did not. He ignored the entire probability of people being uninterested in their contents.
Thirdly, are there any competition of Super Screen in the industry that is attracting audience? There is no ention of this crucial factor in the prompt. This factor affects the problem directly. If there is competition, the audience will get divided between Super Screen and them. Thus decreasing Super Screen's movies' audience.
A lot of factor affects the quality of a production. That being said, the opponent fails to address observation from other departments except advertising. Other departments need to be surveyed thoroughly to get to the conclusion. Without considering those vital aspects it will not wise to follow right into the opponent's direction.
There are many flaws in the prompt's argument. However, the mentioned concerns need to be analyzed first to reach to any solution to the problem. Allocating a greater share of SUper Screen's budget for reaching public through advertising might not be the best suggestion as discussed.
Young people are the torchbearer of a society. They are responsible for the betterment of the future of a society. Preparing young generation for leadership can be complicated. However, making them ready for the future in a positive and cooperative sense is way better than teaching them in the competitive mode.
Humans are triggered both by positive and negative emotion but positive emotion undoubtedly benefits an individual. Instilling a sense of cooperation in young generation instead of competition does the same. It is important to understand that one needs to be positive to live a healthy life and make their surroundings better. Becoming a leader in government, industry or any other fields is a challenging task for sure. One can ameliorate this process just by replacing the competitive method of teaching with a more lenient and amicable method. A method that includes others, encourages one to be more helpful, spreads positivity and most importantly unites the people to make them stronger and better together - is what needed.
Unity and cooperation play a vital role in leadership. Without such qualities, none can become a good leader. For example, the 44th U.S. President Mr. Barack Obama emphasized on unity and cooperation and people admired him truly, they still do. His actions and beliefs were driven by positive emotions instead of competition, rivalry, winning and other negative approaches.
While healthy competition can also motivate people but after a certain point people tend to cross boundaries and harm others just to win the competition. Jealousy, greed, superiority, corruption all these enter in the society if the people are concerned with "winning" all the time. By changing the conventional thought process and instilling empathy and unity in young people, a society can be benefitted in many ways. Great future leaders is one of the biggest advantages of this.
Eliminating competition completely is not the wisest suggestions. That being said the discussed ways are much better to prepare young people and mould them into great leaders in various fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 732, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r and better together - is what needed. Unity and cooperation play a vital role ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 333.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37837837838 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02111237982 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573573573574 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5368330302 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.55 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767347895181 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0232250899963 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0215203148717 0.0758088955206 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0440348346528 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132443287914 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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