A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
School life teaches the basics of all the fields which students learn during their college. Students are trained in such a way that once they enter college, they already know the basic things of what they will learn. The author in the above prompt suggest that, a same national curriculum must be taught to all the students until they enter college. I disagree with the author because of the following reasons.
Boston Public school during 2013, added musical training as a new lecture in the curriculum for the students. This was turned out to be a successful decision as many students started growing their interest towards music and their passion towards learning all the subjects was rising significantly. According to studies it was shown that students had started to perform well in all the subjects after the music lectures was added in their curriculum. Adding music lectures had such a significant impact in education system that many schools started altering their curriculum to find how students were benefited in their performance. Also, the government of United States declared that schools can make curriculum of their own were students are benefited the most. For above example, one can say that curriculum should not be the same for all the schools. In some places if music is given high importance in that place and students can perform well by doing the thing which they has a passion for. Also in some places students are very indulge in sports such that they can do well in all the subjects if they are given opportunity in performing physical activity.
Consider a nation decided not to keep programming as a subject to the students during the school training. So many schools which teaches programming has to remove the subject. If a student wishes to pursue higher education in programming, but if coding was not a subject during his school life then he would never be able to learn the basics of programming and also he would never come to know how good he can perform in coding. Students many times changes their decision as per their interest in the subject. If students cannot get the education according to their interest, they can sometimes not perform well in college too. From the above hypothesis, i can conclude that every schools must provide education according to what students have interest in.
Ofcourse, many believe that curriculum has to be same for the entire nation. But in my opinion, students should never be forced to learn things they are not interested in, infact schools should find out the students interest and according should alter their curriculum by removing subjects were students cannot find their passion for learning or add subjects in which they are benefited by boosting their performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 978, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...form well by doing the thing which they has a passion for. Also in some places stud...
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Line 5, column 656, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...college too. From the above hypothesis, i can conclude that every schools must pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98698481562 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52075857985 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425162689805 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9279600788 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.95 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275299192617 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999255806849 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873204084011 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19939464886 0.150359130593 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755121417173 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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