A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
I partially agree with the statement. I take the position that most students in Taiwan need to learn the same national curriculum, such as math or English, to cultivate lots of professionals in each field. Yet, the other students should establish other expertise which they are competent at, such music or chess.
First of all, most students should study the same national curriculum because they need to earn money to maintain their live, such as paying bills or buying daily supplies. For example, when I was an undergraduate, I majored in computer science, and I had to learn a good deal of professional knowledge, such data structure and algorithm. For one thing, I can put the projects finished in these courses on LinkedIn to obtain many interview opportunities in lots of world-class companies, such as Google and Amazon, and these companies can provide me with a higher salary, such as 10000 dollars per month, to make me lead a better life. For another thing, I can also utilize this professional knowledge to establish my own company, and it can not only bring more profits for me but also provide additional chances for other people to make their own money. Instead, if the college had not provided me with these professional courses, I might have not been able to earn these profits for myself to maintain my life.
Indeed, some opponents argue that a few talent students are skilled at other fields, such as music and sports. If these students choose to study the same national curriculum, they may not be capable of fulfilling their dreams. For example, Kobe Bryant was a top-notch basketball player in the entire world. If he had not decided to play basketball and chosen to study at a college, he might have not be able to become the most famous basketball player. However, not everyone can also become the first-rate basketball player like Kobe Bryant because there are only a few people having astonishing talents like him. If we require the colleges to offer certain professional education for each student, these colleges may not have enough funds to meet this goal. Instead, the colleges may lose lots of money in order to achieve this plan and not be able to cultivate professionals needed by enterprises because of the shortage of money.
Only a few students are extremely interested in certain fields, and other students are still suitable to learn the same national curriculum to learn these professional knowledge which can make them lead a better life. As a result, the schools should provide most students with the basic courses to learn, and the schools can also provide a few students with other professional course which they are interested in. For one thing, the schools will not need to spend an astronomical amount of money to offer a variety of courses. For another thing, the schools can also satisfy the needs of each student.
Ideally, each student has the right to pursue the goals which they are interested in. However, in reality, most students still need to consider the best way to maintain their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r month, to make me lead a better life. For another thing, I can also utilize this ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...e entire world. If he had not decided to play basketball and chosen to study at a...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
...o study at a college, he might have not be able to become the most famous basketba...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, another thing, for example, of course, such as, as a result, first of all, for another thing, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 518.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90926640927 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62702160777 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436293436293 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.922342256 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.095238095 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206094282742 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734784481919 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580633301978 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135655653024 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410943526355 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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