Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for the government to spend money to build art museums and music performance centers than to build recreational facilities (such as swimming pool and playground)
There are many diverse types of facilities in Taiwan, such as the Taipei art center and the Taipei municipal pool. This will raise the question of whether the government should spend money to build art museums and music performance centers than to build recreational facilities. I will take the position that we should cost more money on art museums and music performance centers.
First of all, art museums and music performance centers could broaden our vision through exhibiting lots of different types of exotic artworks. Take the Taipei art center as an example. When I was an undergraduate, I often went to a good deal of art or music centers, such as Taipei art center, which was the top-notch art museum in Taiwan. In 2020, it introduced many foreign artworks, such as “The Sun and Moon”, which was painted by a French painter. Because of the existence of this masterpiece, the tickets for this exhibition were sold out at a fast speed. Moreover, this exhibition also provided us with an opportunity to do a cultural exchange with foreign countries, such as France and England. By contrast, if we had decided to establish more swimming pools or playgrounds, we might not have been able to have such a precious chance to experience these exotic artworks.
Second, art museums and music performance centers could refresh us by offering lots of glamorous masterpieces. Take Taipei municipal music center as an example. In 2018, when I was still a junior engineer, I usually had to deal with many extremely tough projects, such as optimizing an intelligent robot. With these difficult tasks, I always felt deeply frustrated. However, in the middle of 2018, the Taipei municipal music center invited an extraordinary music master named Ryuichi Sakamoto who had once acquired a Grammy Award. I determined to buy a ticket for his concert immediately when I heard this news. In his world-class performance, I could totally refresh myself and escape from my busy daily life. In contrast, if we had chosen to construct more swimming pools or playgrounds, we might not have been capable of obtaining this invaluable chance to refresh ourselves by appreciating these great masterpieces.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I agree with the statement. On one hand, we could have a valuable opportunity to extend our vision. On the other hand, we could also refresh ourselves through viewing these outstanding performances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... Taipei municipal pool. This will raise the question of whether the government should spend money to bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, in contrast, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0671641791 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85842544504 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5010881611 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312466247115 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893262812621 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875809178246 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198472200722 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132437174481 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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