In times of economic crisis governments often reduce the money they spend in some areas Of the three choices listed below if a government is facing economic problems which one should the government spend less money on Arts Scientific research or Parks and | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In times of economic crisis, governments often reduce the money they spend in some areas. Of the three choices listed below, if a government is facing economic problems, which one should the government spend less money on, Arts , Scientific research, or Parks and public gardens?
1.Arts 2.Scientific research 3.Parks and public gardens

In my opinion, facing an economic crisis, the government should make a more reasonable decision that could benefit most people as possible. This will raise the question of whether the government should cut off some budgets for a certain field, like arts, science research, or parks and public gardens. I will take the position that government should diminish some budges of arts.

First of all, spending less money on arts will affect fewer people possibly. The national economic lifeline is usually industry, like the automobile industry in Germany, if the government doesn't actively invest enough money in scientific research, a great number of engineers will be affected largely. For instance, the Taiwanese government provided quite substantial financial support to some well-known companies in the last twenty years, such as TSMC and MediaTek. These companies attentively utilized these funds for their advanced research, and engineers could probably invent more high-tech products by using their professional knowledge. These companies have earned enormous profits in the past decades, and this result lets these corporations have thereby created more than eighty thousand job opportunities by using their earnings in recent years. By contrast, if we spend extremely excessive capital on arts, we may not be capable to directly benefit a majority of local people.

Second, Arts will not necessarily be totally provided by governments. Conversely, Private agencies could perfectly operate lots of excellent arts events by themselves. For example, in 2015, Taipei Arts Festival was first held by a private company, which was named Taipei Visual Design. During the glamorous activity, this company exhibited lots of distinguished artworks, which immediately attracted many people successfully. Thus, the tickets for this arts festival were sold out immediately three days after the opening, and the result of the Taipei Arts Festival was better than expected. Accordingly, this company decided to plan larger-scale art fairs in the future by using their profits accurately. In contrast, parks and public gardens can’t be constructed by private companies entirely. Instead, they will need to be designed carefully by all of the government departments in terms of the urban plan.

To sum up, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that the government should greatly reduce the budget for arts. For one thing, shortening the funds for arts will actually affect fewer people. For another thing, arts events could be held by some extraordinary private companies instead of the government.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ost people as possible. This will raise the question of whether the government should cut off some budg...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... industry in Germany, if the government doesnt actively invest enough money in scienti...
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Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...uccessfully. Thus, the tickets for this arts festival were sold out immediately thre...
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Line 5, column 849, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y will need to be designed carefully by all of the government departments in terms of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, conversely, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, another thing, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2208.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50623441397 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75876304978 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571072319202 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9544817219 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.05 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.55 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236050358866 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709200331581 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563461408774 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147474360575 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552175787967 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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