The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president of Grove College and the director of the alumnae have opposing views on whether the all-female college should begin accepting male students. However, they both must answer the following questions to strengthen their claims.
The president states that other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation. Yet, Can Grove College produce the same result as other schools? Not every school can generate a result as good as these schools which has adopted coeducation successfully. For example, if these successful colleges are located in the downtown, they will be easier to recruit the students both men and women. However, if other schools are located in the rural areas, and there are more women than men, these colleges will not be able to recruit male students easily. Furthermore, having more students will need more funds to run the school, and Grove College cannot assure that it has enough capital to fulfill this coeducation program. On top of that, other school may have some potent accesses to acquire the subsidies from the government. It does not mean that Grove College can have the same opportunity to get enough funds.
The director of the alumnae claims that two surveys of incoming students and Grove alumnae both show that these students and alumnae want to keep the tradition of all-female education. However, are these surveys have reliable results? When these students were doing these surveys, they might not have enough time to think about the questions in the questionnaire seriously. Thus, these respondents might cheat on these surveys. Most importantly, the author didn’t provide us with the surveys’ information, including how many respondents were participating in these surveys, and where were these respondents from. There might be more than two thousand incoming students in Grove College in the past years. Therefore, if these surveys were only based on twenty incoming students, these results would be highly suspect.
The coeducation may somewhat bring a few benefits for Grove College, but the author needs to answer the above questions to strengthen his or her argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1780 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.159 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.841 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34011627907 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63923872685 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517441860465 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1269759034 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.055555556 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255037668044 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976421613551 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134382677594 0.0701772020484 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160687674781 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112446330684 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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