In order to keep the college all female the director of the alumnae association gives several relatively sound reasons. However, in my opinion, the director still needs to answer several questions that could totally negate these reasons, or it is not necessary to worry about some bad results of coeducation.
The director believe that the surveys of students are effective, the results show that students choose the Grove College primarily because of all-female status. However, there is a question that could attack the surveys. We do not know the concrete numbers of students that were surveyed and how many students hold the position above. For example, if the college recruits 1000 students every year, and 100 students are interviewed and only 10 students hold the position. Then the survey is not convincible, the survey could not reflect the mind of all students. Besides this, we still need to know whether questions in the survey objective are, they may lead students to say that they choose the college because of all-female education by asking like “what do you think of all-female education”. In such case, students may not tell the truth. In order to answer the question, the director should offer more information about the surveys.
In addition, the director seems to believe that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, and the college should keep such tradition. But the question here is whether such traditional education mode is really benefit for students and is worth to keeping? We should recognize that when students choose a school, the first thing they consider is education quality, like some famous teachers, higher employment, better teaching environments and so on. The alumnae association thinks that the all-female education is the very identity that could help to attract students, that is unreasonable. The director should provide more strong evidence that could show today’s students still believe that all-female education could attract them.
Last but not the least, the director also mentions a survey of Grove alumnae, and the director says that majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all females. The survey is more problematic than the surveys former. For the survey here just show the attitudes of respondents, that means there are still some people do not respond. If the survey only reflects the respondents’ mind, then it is totally not trustworthy. We should know that only the one who support the director would like to answer the survey and be one of respondents. So, the director should also take a survey about how many alumnae answer the survey, if there only a small part of them answers the questions, then the survey is invalid. Then the director should also make it clear that how the people that do not respond think about the coeducation. Only answer these questions, we can figure out the alumnae association’s real mind.
All in all, the director tries to keep the tradition of all-female education, and some seemingly persuasive reasons are rendered. However, they are problematic and can be toppled by the questions above. If one of the reasons is wrong, then the director cannot persuade others, not to mention all of them could be wrong. The director should think more and try to answer the questions in order to keep the all-female education.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 551 350
No. of Characters: 2743 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.845 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.978 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.507 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.407 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.104 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.63 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...results of coeducation. The director believe that the surveys of students are effect...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... more information about the surveys. In addition, the director seems to believe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2833.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 551.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14156079855 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65549679019 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404718693285 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 863.1 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5969605342 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.925925926 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4074074074 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03703703704 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180841584145 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620116955707 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768058147063 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125404004715 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519984095284 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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