The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president of Grove College said that they should start admitting men because it can bring more enrollment and applications. However, the director of the alumnae claims that it is essential to preserve the traditional of all female education. Both of them should answer the question below to make their assert more convincing.
First, the president states that the other all-female colleges that experienced an increased enrollment after they adopting coeducation. We need to ask, which college is the other all-female colleges? For example, if the other all-female college which start admitting the man is a royal school before. They only permit those girls who has the royal background to enroll in school. Now, they start to accept the normal background students and male to study in their college. It is normal that the number of enrollments increased. But It can not prove that the increase of the enrollment is because of the coeducation. There might probably is because the female students who have the normal background get into the college.
Second, the director of the alumnae cites annual surveys of incoming students to indicate the all-female status was the primary reason for them to select Grove. However, what is the other students in Grove and the all faculty opinions of the coeducation? The incoming students could not represent all the voice of the Grove. If all the students and faculty agree to have the coeducation, because students need to learn how to get along with man, or even they eager to have a relation with man during their youth. The director of the alumnae should launch a questionnaire include all the students, faculty and incoming students to make sure all the advice and perspective have considered.
Last, the director of the alumnae also points to a survey of Grove alumnae which have a majority of respondents to keep the college all female. What is the exactly number of the “majority” respondents? For example, there are one hundred of the alumnae, only 30 people have responded to the survey and 29 of them wants to preserve the tradition of Grove. Indeed, if is a majority of the 30 people who has reply to the survey. It is so inaccurate to say lots of people in alumnae want to keep the college all female, because there are still half of the alumnae don’t have respond their thoughts.
The president and the director both have to answer questions mentioned above to strengthen their claims.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1987 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.811 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.548 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.773 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'replied'.
Suggestion: replied
... is a majority of the 30 people who has reply to the survey. It is so inaccurate to s...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 571, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'responded'.
Suggestion: responded
...re still half of the alumnae don’t have respond their thoughts. The president and t...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97815533981 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67368994439 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424757281553 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3137674874 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2272727273 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04545454545 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312153218093 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104235605089 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119229565384 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158724321147 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095913387196 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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