Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In my country young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young Use reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In my country, young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young. Use reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is critically important that young people have a better life than the previous generation which represent that the society is making progress. In my opinion, I believe that the young people don’t have a better life than their parents in my country. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, the burden on the young is heavier than before. My country is facing the low birth rate and the low mortality rate, leading the young people should have to take the responsibility of taking care of the elder. To make thing worse, the price of things such as cars, house, or other assets, are getting higher and higher. Only the salary become lower and lower. For example, the young people need to work for fifty years to make enough money to afford a house. Their parents become older and need them to support their life, such as paying the medical, seeing doctor and other needs of the living. On the other hand, two decades ago, the economy in my country is boosting. The real estates are still at the low price and there are siblings in a family. So the burden could be distribute to every children.

Furthermore, the common of the transportation makes the distance between country to country isn’t that enormous. The competition between the company is upheaval. Company could hire the talented people through the world. For example, my cousin who works at the large company. The employee in there keep feeling anxiety about there job. The are afraid of the talented people at other countries would replace them and they would loss the job. They work hard to remain in the company which put lots of pressure on them. However, the transportation was not that convenient at our parent’s generation. The works are only for the people in those area. They do not need to worry about other people at the different country would take away their jobs.

In conclusion, I strongly feel that the young people don’t have a better life than their parent when they were young. This is because the price of the real estates is not that high and the birth rate is higher than nowadays that could reduce the responsibilities and stress on the young, and the transportation isn’t that convenient and affordable to make the competition intense.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e keep feeling anxiety about there job. The are afraid of the talented people at other ...
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Line 5, column 634, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...n. The works are only for the people in those area. They do not need to worry about other ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76884422111 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44218003579 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469849246231 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8050874791 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0833333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5833333333 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320709378865 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852164082588 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107439425208 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22297057777 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773750718893 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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