Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Celebrities is an critical important role among the society. There is a controversial question about the opinions of celebrities influence more on younger people or older people. In my opinion, I hold young people might be more affected by celebrities. It make me feel this way for two main reasons that I will explore in my following essay.
First of all, young people can access to those opinions from popularities easily. To be more specific, youngers are more familiar with technologies than older people. My experience is the best illustration of this. When I was in junior high school, I love to play badminton. Tai Tzu Ying, the top-notch badminton player in the world was my idol at that time. She kept sharing her perspectives and training life on her Facebook. In this case, I just kept scrolling on my phone to receive the first-hand posts from her. However, older people might not be familiar with social media or the novel technology. Therefore, they do not have chances to have a glimpse to those celebrities opinions.
Secondly, young people are more easily to have the admiration to popular people, because they lack of percise judgement and critical thinking. For example, ten years ago, my friend, Jack, had an admiration to a singer. When the singer show her perference about the brand, Jack will quickly buy all the stuffs of that brand. In fact, the singer was just marketing for that brand, rather than though the products of the brand were good. But Jack can not judge things right and think thoroughly at that time. He spent enormous money on buying those products which makes him felt regret after he grew up.
In conlcusion, I strongly believe that the perspective of celebrities are more important to youngers than they are to older people. This is because young people are more likely to expose to those views from social media and also lack of judgement and critical thinking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88036809816 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60978775644 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555214723926 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1310397914 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.7619047619 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5238095238 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223776164431 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686093863194 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784708614261 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160059213917 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727135029256 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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