Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Thanks to the improvement of technologies, it is easy to know the events around the world. Knowing these things might be critically important for everyone in the world, no matter the things will affect you or not. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will explore more in following essay.
First of all, knowing things happening in other country will make people be more familiar when the same things happen on them. To be more specific, knowing the events happening around the world, people can have preparations to face those events earlier. For example, last year, the Covid-19 threaten all over the world. Lots of places were suffer from the virus which caused enormous people dead. However, my country, Taiwan, did not have any case of Covid-19 last year. But in this year, Taiwan also underwent the threaten of Covid-19. By knowing about the events and solutions in other countries, Taiwan quickly solved the problem and slow down the virus to spread around the country. If we did not know about the events from other country last year, Taiwan's situation definetly will be more sever than today.
Second, knowing the events happening around the world can boarden one's horizon which can bring lots of benefits for individuals. My experience is the best illustration of this. When I was in junior high school, I kept watching CNN in the morning to learn about the different things happened in other countries. Although these things might be unrelated to me at that time, I still kept maintaining this habits until now. Still, learning these news from TV programs, my international horizon become broader. One day, I work at an international company. These knowledge and the international views make me feel more relax when I communicate with foreigners. I have lots of different topics to talk with them and make them think I am quite professional. In this case, I am outstanding in the company. At last, I became the CEO of that company.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should know about events happening around the world. It will not only make you have more time to prepare about how to face those situations but also boarden the horizon which might be benefit to one's career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: suffered
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87798408488 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54323408239 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503978779841 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4562886677 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9565217391 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3913043478 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188868491671 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05735490836 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615604123218 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141727672126 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519250695878 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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