All around the world, people are living longer than ever before. Which of the following do you think are the main causes of this phenomenon? You may choose more than one option.
The development of new technology
Changes to our eating habits
Improvements to our working conditions
Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. Do not use memorized examples.
Nowadays, the mortality rate of the whole world is decreasing. The longevity of human being is way longer than before. In my opinion, the main cause of this phenomenon is because the development of new technology. There are two reasons which I will explore at the following essay.
To begin with, the development of new technology could bring significant progress in medical. The more specific and accurate data we receive from the analyze model, the more powerful medicine we could invent. For example, the Covid-19 struck the global and killed lots of people at first. However, after the effort made from the vaccine study. Researchers could quickly realize the methods to make people recover from the Covid-19 virus. If we don’t have accurate technology in the medical field, I believe that there might have more people suffer in the Covid-19, or even half of the population of the world would be dead. Because we could not make the vaccine fast enough to defeat the virus.
Secondly, the improvement of the new technology could let all of the citizen know about the right concept about the public sanitation. Take the coronavirus as an example again. If the government first discover the virus is out braking, but they could just write a letter and post on the building’s wall. Because there isn’t television or internet in our home. Therefore, the important information can not spread quickly to all citizens in the country. Public might still not aware that there is going to have a disease that could be enormously dangerous to human health. People keep talking to others without mask and the classroom still filled with students, or even the public won’t wash their hands after getting home. Until everyone notice about the information of the out braking disease, it might be too late to prevent the virus or establish the right perspective of the sanitation.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the main reason of people living longer than before is because the development of the new technology. The technology not only could bring significant improvement in medical researches, but also quickly establish and spread the right concept of the sanitation to every citizen which could expand the human’s lifespan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cific and accurate data we receive from the analyze model, the more powerful medicine we co...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... population of the world would be dead. Because we could not make the vaccine fast enou...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ovement of the new technology could let all of the citizen know about the right concept ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09485094851 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62008189492 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523035230352 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4544250362 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5238095238 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182772707208 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532130771386 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638337637359 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134355141845 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700984945272 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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