Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The budget of the government are limited and the use of the bedget is a critically important problem for the government. There is a hot debate on whether the government should spend more money on arts than sport or not. In my opinion, I agree with this statement. It makes me feel this way by having two main reasons which I will explore in following essay.
First of all, more people focus on sports rather than arts. To be more specific, the government should spend more money on appealing people to pay attention on art activities. For example, my friend, Judy, is major in art in her colloege. She said that their art events are always lack of people. No one know that there have a art exhibition in gallery, because people are just focusing on other things, such as sport competitions or music concerts. To solve this problem, the government should put more money in art field to help artists advertising their art works,such as building more galleries or hold art contests to improve citizen's awarness of art.
Secondly, due to lots of people focusing on sport events, athletics might have more companies want to sponsor them. In contrast, companies don't want to sponsor artists because few people focus in arts. Therefore, companies can not recieve any benefits or increase their products selling. In this case, the burden of the artists might be significant. They should afford all the stuffs by themselves. If the government doesn't spend more money in support of the arts, lots of artists will have finance difficulties to create their masterpieces. At last, arts will disappear in our culture.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government should spent more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics. This is because people pay more attention on sport events rather than arts , governmet should raise public awarness of art. Also, artists need to afford all the cost because there doesn't have any company wants to sponsor them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90718562874 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56761537167 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511976047904 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.166734143 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.95 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293883509594 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903934421497 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893105672415 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196361034489 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469947588701 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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