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Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

In modern days, With the accelerating development of our society, arts and athletics have been playing two important roles in our daily life. It's hard to judge which has more significance. Some people advocate that governments should spend more funds in support of the arts. Others maintain a contrary view that athletics is worth more attention and investment. Both of these ideas have their bases, they need to be scrutinized meticulously. In my opinion, I disagree that governments spend more money on supporting arts.

First of all, supporting athletics can provide more chances and better environments for the athletes. Government influences the public. When governments indicate that they would like to put more money into supporting athletics, it also means they support that citizens pay more energy and income on sports. Sports means more than arts to some degree, and the activities can involve almost all kinds of people even handicaps. For instance, if the government would like to cultivate athletics such as sportsmen from Olympic teams, the influence of a gold medalist is huge. Children would arouse their interest in sports because the athletes have set a good example. Sportsmanship could be a good teacher for teenagers, who needs somebody to encourage when facing difficulties and adversity that they should overcome them with diligence, perseverance and strong belief. As the Roman poet, Juvenal, famously said, " A healthy mind is to be found in a healthy body." Only if sports are paid attention by the nation and citizens, the country would develop better with their strong and vigorous people.

Moreover, let's talk about why we don't spend more funds on the arts. As I have mentioned, sports has a highly educational effect, yet arts are not so educational for all citizen. It's known that arts are somehow obscure and pluralistic. An artwork may contain different and several meanings and some reflect the dark side of society, which is too early to expose to children, and teenagers without correct directions would unconsciously imitate some of the actions.

Besides, there is a saying that 'Artists are inspired by the suffering.' Vincent van Gogh was the best example. He lived on the breadline, with no money, no family, not to mention applause. While Auguste Rodin was hiring beautiful naked models to dance in the studio, Vincent couldn't afford any models, so he can only repeat painting himself towards the mirror over and over again. Through his self-portraits, a lonely and bitter image comes out of the canvas, there's more than beauty, but a story, an attitude, an era. Shakespeare said that art is a mirror held up to nature. All of these wonderful poetic images of mythology are referring to something in individuals. In that case, art is also very personal and doesn't always have model answers, which means it is not same easy as sports to popularize.

To maximize profit, the government tends to invest money in a more profitable project. When we invest the same money in an art exhibition and a sports competition, it is quite conspicuous that the sports competition appeals to more audience and attracts more attention. Thus, sports will become a culture if we treated it seriously, like the Olympics, which symbolizes freedom and equality. Also, sports is more resilient, whenever a country, unfortunately, was involved in a war, the museum and artworks are easy to be destroyed, these masterpieces are too fragile for conservation. But sports don't, like the Olympics, it was suspended during World War, but returned after the war was over.

Lastly, the relationship between artists and athletes is mutual. Athletes represent the national physical strength, artists represent the national mental strength. Neither of them is negligible. But as for a country, we require our people physically strong first and let the athletes be role models. when seeing them competing against the opponents, we feel uniform, a kind of national cohesion.

Therefore, governments should spend more money in support of the athletics, such as state-sponsored Olympic teams and so on. And the athletics field can perform better than now if we pay more attention to it. While there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people's eyes, I believe my opponents will compromise after reading my article.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, for instance, kind of, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3644.0 1977.66487455 184% => OK
No of words: 704.0 407.700716846 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17613636364 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1510191538 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.805178717 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 366.0 212.727598566 172% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519886363636 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1123.2 618.680645161 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.6003584229 189% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8341435276 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4358974359 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0512820513 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82051282051 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356449719016 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788078775834 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11776331831 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170033830978 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124980392714 0.0645574589148 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 186.0 86.8835125448 214% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, for instance, kind of, such as, first of all, in my opinion

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