All around the world, people are living longer than ever before. Which of the
following do you think are the main causes of this phenomenon? You may
choose more than one option.
- The development of new technology
- Changes to our eating habits
- Improvements to our working conditions
Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
Nowadays, people's living conditions are getting better and better compared to the past. In my opinion, the progression of new technology has had the most positive contribution to this phenomenon because individuals are experiencing a more enjoyable and healthier lifestyle as well. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective.
To begin with, nowadays, people have chances to visit different parts of the world, which enables them to have a better and enjoyable life, because of aeroplanes, trains, advanced cars, and so forth. So influential is travelling that it helps people to release all the stresses which they have owing to their jobs. As a matter of fact, the more they travel, the better they can release their tensions and pressures causing to have a healthier and longer life. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. My brother always travels to various countries in his free time. He always says that "thank technology, I feel lively and I have a great life. I think he will have a longer life because of a lot of travelling. As a result, new technology provides a chance for people to have a better lifestyle; therefore, if we did not have new technology, my brother would not be able to travel which has a direct effect on his long life.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that on the one hand, some people believe that new technologies such as mobile phone are a dangerous and harmful for people because of emitting harmful signals, yet, on the other hand, some people believe that not only new technology does have a detrimental effect, but also they are useful for people such as technologies related to medicine. I will take the former viewpoint with a grain of salt and claim that the latter point is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that advances of technology in medicine help professors to recognize many illnesses such as cancer, diabetes, which helps people to have a longer life in comparison with the past that people died easily because of the lack of medical facilities.
To wrap it up, based on what mentioned above, on soon realizes that people have are living longer than the past inasmuch as in the first place, the technology is helping them to have an enjoyable and memorable life by travelling to the far area, as in the second place, they have a healthier life owing to new technologies which are able to recognize the cause of diseases compared to the past
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, i think, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72917802615 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478571428571 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.278370941 48.9658058833 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.714285714 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.1428571429 5.45110844103 278% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173100466957 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621979582762 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331648314888 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115208509603 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00788391211711 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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