All around the world, people are living longer than ever before. Which of the following do you think are the main causes of this phenomenon? You may choose more than one option.
The development of new technology
Changes to our eating habits
Improvements to our working conditions
Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. Do not use memorized examples.
These days a myriad of people were wondering why folks are able to live longer than before. personally, I believe that technological development and the type of food are the main cause of this phenomenon. I will discuss each point in the following essay.
To commence with, technology brought up to us a lot of medical discoveries and treatment options that were unknown before. most of people in the past were dying when they were in their middle ages without obvious cause. Howevere, nowadays, physicians are able to diagnose the illness in it is early stage. As a result of that, they are able to make a treatment plan and save the lives of the patients. my own personal experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Two years a go I want for regular check up and my priemary care physician sent me to do CT scan. Unfortunately, they discovered a thyroid cancer on my neck wich was in it is initial stage of development. after that I had it removed surgically. Thank you to the technology that allow all doctors to save people life. As you can see, if there is no such equipment, I would not be able to be traeted and I my life was in danger because I was going to die at any moment.
The second most exquisite point I mentioned was the change in eating habits, in which people todays are focusing on eating healthy food and their concern is about their appearance. healthy food will not only improve the person's look, but also avoid serious diseases such as Diabtes Millitus, high chlosterol ,and blood pressure. my dad is a perfect example of this point. my dad had a stroke becaus of his obesity, after he had treated, all his doctors advised him to start low diet food. the rule was applied to all the familly and we started to eat a healthy food as well. so this become as a habit in our family and the city that we are living in. Had we not eaten a healthy food, we would not be able to live as long as we are living now.
in conclusion, regarding the aforementioned argument, the developemnet of technology and change that eating habit are the most important factors that allow people to live longer than their ancestors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, well, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48849104859 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58613938166 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7074068263 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5714285714 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217481245774 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593011492402 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631232520993 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15456751781 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615939246664 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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