governmnet should funds their students or apply SAV

Essay topics:

governmnet should funds their students or apply SAV

Education is an important on development of countries. Some governments pay whole tution as a funds for their students while others are unable to fully funds fee for their students instead, they try to follow strategy called income-share agreement. In my view, I agree with this strategy for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay

To commence with. ISA ( income-share agreement) ensure that student will not travel to another country after finishing his or her education. As a result, they will stay serving their country. My experience is a compelling example of that. My country send students oustide the country to study their major either as doctors or as engineering and it pay all tutions and life expenses for them. Most of these students after they graduate, unfortunatley, they go to Saudia arabia or Dubai to work their. By this way the governmnet lost their money in order to serve other countries. Moreover our country need such those folks to help in devloping and improving our country either in hosbitals or in companies. Howevere, if my government apply income- share strategy, all those students will go back and serve their country because they know that they own their government a lot of mony. by this strategy, government will return it is money back and improve their service to the community.

Second reason is that. As I mentioned earlier that government will return it is money back even during long period, government can use this money in building univerities which will help the government to allow their student to study inside the country rather than travelling outside to foriegn city and spending a lot of money for other government. For instance, Eygpt applied income-share agreement and used this money in building alot of unvesities in different cities. In 2009 the government prevent any students from studying outsuide the country and allow all of them to study in the new university. As you can see Eygpet govenment not only save their money but offer more job by oppeing myriad of schools and improv education.

in conclusion, for the aforementiond reasons, I agree with the income -share strategy to be applied by the government not becasue it will garentee that their students will come back and serve their community, but it will improve their education by building many universities with that mony came from students salaries after they get their job, furthermore, it will offer many job opportunity for employee in the universities. Thats why I encourage all government to apply this strategy

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05660377358 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72642733561 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.0473857619 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.842105263 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228304196359 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728898066064 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653835249597 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158131353492 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398239284485 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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