All around the world, people are living longer than ever before. Which of the following do you think are the main causes of this phenomenon? You may choose more than one option. The development of new technology, changing our eating habits. Improvements to our working conditions.
There are many different reasons why humans are living longer and healthier than in the past. In my opinion, the main two causes that are allowing people to live longer are the development of new technology and the improvements of working conditions.
To begin with, medical technology has advanced so much in the last few years, which can help people to cure and prevent future illness. Many people in the past died because of the lack of resources in medicine. Thankfully, today technology is advantageous in identifying illnesses such as cancer and diabetes in earlier stages. When a disease is detected earlier, it enhances the chances of finding a cure and prolongs people's survival. For instance, I was told that my grandfather died at the age of 45 from a heart attack when he appeared healthy to his family. Additionally, modern technology has alerted my grandfather’s younger brother that he has been carrying the gene for diabetes. Thanks to this information my uncle's life has been prolonged and he remains healthy by taking precautions on his intake and exercising regularly, therefore, allowing him to live a normal life. Unfortunately, it was nearly impossible a few decades ago to be able to detect if a family member's sickness was due to genetic causes.
Secondly, working conditions have improved significantly in modern society, helping people to do safer and less handwork than in the past. For instance, a few years ago, people used to work longer hours under the sun, causing them to become dehydrated. Being exposed to heat for longer periods lowers people’s immune systems; thus, they can develop chronic diseases such as kidney issues causing their death at an early age. People back then had neither safe working conditions, nor reduction of their physical work. On the other hand, modern society has created new regulations that prevent people from overwork. These actions help people not to expose themselves to overwork, but to maintain a healthier immune system which allows them to live longer.
Overall, when we are comparing today and the past, human life expectancy has increased due to the development of medical technology, and less exploiting work conditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT
Message: Use simply 'many'.
There are many different reasons why humans are living longer an...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1643454039 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8105697745 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604456824513 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.868848588 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.058823529 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167461137528 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568126901282 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558237879607 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116562288701 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875718183048 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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