Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults Which view do you agree with Use examples to support your position

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"Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position."

Adulthood is the most crucial time in a person’s life because it is during this time that their characteristics and personalities are created. The environment where young adults live influences their life. Friends and family play an important role in the lives of young adults which can affect them positively or negatively.

Positive relationships with parents and siblings help young adults grow mentally and physically strong. Young adults look up to their parents because it is from them that they learned to talk, behave and conduct themselves. Moreover, parents should be mindful that their actions can be replicated by their children since children spend most of their time around them. For instance, when parents raise their children in an authoritative environment, they are also encouraging them to be independent, set limits and boundaries. This type of parenting leads children to develop better traits such as leadership, self-control, and self-reliance. In light of these actions, I believe that family is the one that influences the most in young adults' lives, so that is why families should make sure to be able to grow children in their best adult selves version.

On the contrary, friendship is not always beneficial for young adults because some friendships can be toxic and stressful. Also, when teenagers have not had a well-structured childhood, they are open to any temptations, for example, they can be manipulated easily by their friends. Moreover, some friends can have bad habits using substances such as cigarettes, alcohol, drugs, and so on. If children are living in this type of environment, they can be dragged into as well. Unhealthy friendships could also bring more consequences to young adults' for example lowering their self-esteem impacting negatively their future. Furthermore, lower self-esteem can reduce the quality of life in many different ways, including negative feelings, constant self-criticism often these can lead to persistent feelings of sadness. Consequently, young adults who do not have the right guidance in their childhood might find life challenging.

Overall, all families should be aware that they are the first teachers for children. That is why it is very important to raise children in a safe, loving, and pleasant surrounding.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25833333333 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83653277962 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 360.0 20.1344086022 1788% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1893.0 100.406767564 1885% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 360.0 20.6045352989 1747% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 121.0 5.45110844103 2220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213046559976 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213046559976 0.076458572812 279% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140847547013 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703499349825 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 183.3 11.7677419355 1558% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -293.92 58.1214874552 -506% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 143.7 10.1575268817 1415% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.71 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.09 8.01818996416 313% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.002688172 590% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 146.0 10.0537634409 1452% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 59.0 10.247311828 576% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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