Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with and why?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Friends and family are the integral part of our life. Both of them plays a vital role during our course of time. In the given scenario, it is perceived that whether it is a family or acquaintance that can have impact in our life. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that undoubtedly, it is our parents who supports us in every single stage of our life irrespective of any situation. However, some friends are like gem to us yet we cannot trust them all blindly. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, we spend more of our time in home and the ambiance of our home have a great influence in our life. To be more precise, since parents are referred as our first teacher, they teach us basic knowledge about morals and values that are essential in our life. Similarly, we tend to obey them as well as we respect and obey them. On other hand, some friends might not provide genuine suggestion because of the fear we would surpass them in excellence. Drawing from my own experience, when I was in school once I asked my friend to solve a question which I was not able to answer. Then guess what? What did she do? She deliberately taught me the wrong answer merely because she had a fear she would be in position after me. Indeed, we should not solely rely on our friends and should be mindful the parents can never go wrong when it comes to their children. They are always thoughtful towards us. Hence, they should be the source of inspiration rather than our fake friends.
Secondly, even though we spend our entire day with our colleagues at the end of a day we need our family so bad. In addition, nothing can beat the interconnection that we have with our family. They never fails to impact us in any way. Furthermore, they can envision our future in as way that would shape our future. For instance, no one can understand children better than their own family. They know about the strongest side as well as flaws yet they do not point out our weakness. Instead, they accord best suggestion accordingly. On contrary, this would not be the case among friends as there will be the sense of competition as mentioned earlier. Besides, they can go up to any level to be in front line no matter what consequences they have to face. Needless to say, owing to the unselfish nature and unconditional love, care and support of our family, we can combat any challenges in our life. Therefore, unquestionably parents are the one who can positively influence us to a great extent and we should always stick to their ground.
All things considered, there is no second thought on why it is the parents who can motivate and encourage their kids to flourish in life. Family support is always welcoming and this always wins over the fake love of false friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...perceived that whether it is a family or acquaintance that can have impact in our...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'accord the best'.
Suggestion: accord the best
...t point out our weakness. Instead, they accord best suggestion accordingly. On contrary, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, as well as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52559055118 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54367501178 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503937007874 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0793907514 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6333333333 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.072979687452 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234541075513 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0205005603088 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0507047685514 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158004939733 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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