Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults Which view do you agree with

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Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with?

Some individual emphasize importance of friends’ effect on young age people whereas others contend that family members has more effect on young people. In my perspective, I agree with the later one which is emphasize on family members effect on juveniles. The reasons behind this viewpoint is discussed in the following essays.
First reason that I think that family members have influence is that adults spend most of their time with family. In fact, human-beings grow up with their family and they live with their family members until they are 18 years old. They eat meals such as lunch or dinner with their parents. They watch movie at cinema and television with their brothers and sisters. Even though, it is true that young adult spend some of their free time with their friends, it is meager amount of time which friends couldn’t have an effect on juveniles' behaviors and adults' style of living. Therefore, since juveniles spend most of their time including their spare time as well as consuming daily meals, family members have an impact on them.
Secondly, family member know what an adult likes or dislikes. Indeed, parents are only people that understand their daughter's or son's interest. For example, a mother of a boy is familiar about his child's food preference and she knows that if his son eats sandwich, he feels great or if his son drinks a cup of coffee, he will relax, while it is rare to a friend have that knowledge. Additionally, a brother or sister of that boy is aware what he hates. Therefore, if family members want to influence on an adults in order to improve his attitude and behavior, they know that they can cook his favorite food to give encouragement for him to do so.
In conclusion, I contend that families has a main effect on adults because these individuals spend most of times with adults and they are aware of their interest and hatred and because parents have good effect on them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'emphasized'.
Suggestion: emphasized
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an adult' or simply 'adults'?
Suggestion: an adult; adults
... if family members want to influence on an adults in order to improve his attitude and be...
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Line 4, column 100, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the times') or simply say ''most times''.
Suggestion: most of the times; most times
... adults because these individuals spend most of times with adults and they are aware of their...
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Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cause parents have good effect on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7994011976 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49440012507 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520958083832 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5692991539 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.866666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203833181901 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717474775561 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720095119694 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123231328117 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685947813968 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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