TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that today a trip is of paramount importance in humankind' life since people can get a benefit of refreshing moods. This brings us a highly controversial topic surrounding trips to other nations whether it is advantageous to have a trip to other country or it is beneficial to travel in our own country. I believe that people benefit more by traveling to foreign countries. The reasons behind this standpoint are related to having a fun time, as well as increasing knowledge which I will explain them in great detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people will enjoy their leisure time, if they visit foreign countries. In fact, each country has its own culture and by familiarity with other nations' culture, visitors will have an enjoyable time. However, people traveling in their own country may acquaint with cultures and they will not feel pleasure. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. I had a short journey to India last year, despite the beautiful landscapes India has, it has various cultural ceremonies. One of these ceremony was that they gather together and spread colorful powder to each other faces and bodies. This was a joyful moment that I had there because of participating in this cultural event and had a fun time. Nevertheless, I had not had the same experience on my trip to the cities in my own country before I traveled to the country of India. Therefore, a trip to other nations will be beneficial for people, as they may observe cultural occurrences that will enjoy.
The second point worth discussing is related to extending knowledge. In other words, people can learn new things, if they travel to other countries. One of knowledge that travelers can gain is about environments and animal habitats. For instance, I had a journey to the US led by tour guide last month with my family members. The tour guide took us to cities and we visited technological innovative cities such as New York City. Not only did we acquire a wealth of information regarding American people's lifestyle but also we learned new thing about native animals. This happened when we visited various national parks. In one of the national park, there was a big zoo containing a lot of native animals such as grizzly bear. I learned a lot of knowledge about grizzly bears’ habitat including types of food they eat or which areas are their favorite place to live. Nevertheless, all these valuable information could not be gained in my countries zoos, as the grizzly bears do not exist in my country. Consequently, if individuals travel to other countries, it is likely that they will learn new things concerning the native animals of other continents.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that the benefits of traveling to foreign country exceed the advantages of taking a journey to own country because individuals will not only extend their knowledge but also will have an enjoyable time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 516, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this ceremony' or 'these ceremonies'?
Suggestion: this ceremony; these ceremonies
...has various cultural ceremonies. One of these ceremony was that they gather together and sprea...
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Line 3, column 496, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ealth of information regarding American peoples lifestyle but also we learned new thing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9422310757 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81723244022 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48406374502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1986425131 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.24 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.08 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184733051979 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612366066697 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722952327514 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131143663163 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320699278182 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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