Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
Many people have a hectic life in todays' world since they have devote most of their time on working. Traveling in one of the amusing hobby of these people. Some people are inclined toward the idea that there are many advantage in traveling inside our country. However, others may hold an opposite viewpoint and believe that traveling abroad is more beneficial for people. In my perspective, people benift more from traveling to foreign countries compare to their own country since not only they learn about their culture, but also they learn new things.
The first point worth mentioning is that people become familiar with culture of other countries. Countries all around the world have their past history and because of that they have their uniqe tradition and culture in the present days which are interesting for people. For example, a person who take a trip to the Spain can learn about materials they used in their food. It is possible they use a specific vegtable in their food which enhance health of their people. Also, people can learn about sacred ritual in other countries which aid people to broaden their perspective about religous subjects.
A furthur more subtle to point is that we can improve owr knowledge by learning another language and high-tech devices. Learning languae is a challenging taks for many people. One of the merits of traveling abroad is that we can learn another language since it forces us to socialize with people of there. For example, when a student want to travel to a foreign country, he has to learn rudimentary knowledge of their language in a practical way. Since he will interact with other people, he gain a better understanding of the language. Moreover, people can use the advanced technology and facilities like subway which use it for transportation. Therefore, a person can gain a better idea about all the conveniences his country lack and improve his information about other country.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, due to learn other culture in a meticolous details and enhance our understanding, it is more necessary for all people around the world to try abroad trip.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'devoted'.
Suggestion: devoted
...ic life in todays world since they have devote most of their time on working. Travelin...
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Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
...inclined toward the idea that there are many advantage in traveling inside our country. Howeve...
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Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a practical way" with adverb for "practical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rudimentary knowledge of their language in a practical way. Since he will interact with other peop...
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Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
... he will interact with other people, he gain a better understanding of the language....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97245179063 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62956569209 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493112947658 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4659970046 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.277777778 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233442519396 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789755592521 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646271566659 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146122777584 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934859243081 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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