In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Some people are inclined toward the idea that adults should learn how to spend their money at young age. However, others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that it is not necessary for adults to learn manage their own money when they are at a young stage of their life. In my perspective, it is vital for adults to try to manage their money at young age, in order to become financially responsible. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason worth mentioning is that children learn the importance of currency. Nowadays, many parents have a financial problem since their income and expense do not match each other. Therefore, they should prevent the same situation to happen for their children when they grow-ups. In this way, children will learn the value of money. For example, parent give their children some indoor tasks such as cleaning rooms or putting out the garbage and they give their children price or money when they finished their assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require work.
A further more subtle point is that children become ready for their future life. It is an undeniable fact that children will leave their parents after a certain age. Therefore, it is an excellent experience to learn how to spend their own money since they will become independable from his parents. For instance, a person who got accepted in a college or university will leave his parent and go to a dormitory. If he has knowledge about financial issue, he can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole mouth. Therefore, he will not face many financial problem in his future life.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are copious advantages for children, to become more responsible in their future life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to manage'
Suggestion: to manage
...it is not necessary for adults to learn manage their own money when they are at a youn...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to earn'.
Suggestion: to earn
...r assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require ...
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Line 5, column 496, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...e can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole mou...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90625 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51288670842 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51875 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4601980239 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3529411765 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439459600355 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144516826064 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103648349523 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261559175287 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124665647784 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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