A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Whether students should be taught the same cirriculum prior to entering college is a thorny issue that has been the issue of a fierce debate in the academic community. On the one hand, proponents of that view claim that all students should have be taught the same material, and, therfore, have the same chance to enter the university of their choosing. On the other hand, the opposing view suggests that should be able to customize the classes they teach, in order to give better incentives to their students and that the students should be able to choose classes of their affinity. As regards my view, I am of the opinion that the teaching process should be altered and adjusted, if possible, to the needs of the students; therefore, I agree with the latter opinion.

To begin with, I believe that students are easily distracted and filled with ennui when they participate in a class they are not interested in. It is a fact that students nowadays are facing more and more distractions compared to earlier times, mainly due to the internet and the social medias. As a result, in order for the teaching proccess to draw their attention, the teacher should be able to adapt to his/her students' interests and needs. To illustrate that idea more clearly, consider a teacher who can identify where the difficulties of a student lie and provide him/her with additional material which did not exist in the original cirriculum.

Furthermore, I have the firm conviction that, since the cognitive abilities of the students diversify, the same should apply to the cirriculum they are taught. For example, consider a stunted student and a student aiming for the Ivy League Universities. If those students are forced to study from the same cirriculum, then at least of one them will not be benefited from the teaching process. So, the teacher should first consider his audience and then shape his/her class. Nevertheless, I have to concede that an unmonitored selection of the cirriculum by a teacher could lie other risks. For example, a teacher could choose to narrow the cirriculum down in order to reduce the hours of his/her work, and in that way the student could be inadequately prepared for college.

To recapitulate, teachers should have the freedom to adjust their course to their students. Nevertheless, to avoid unpleasant surprises for students in the college admission examinations, the cirriculum they choose should be first inspected by an impartial committe, who could identify the cognitive abilities and aims of the students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iew claim that all students should have be taught the same material, and, therfore...
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... class they are not interested in. It is a fact that students nowadays are facing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, as regards, at least, for example, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02369668246 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75456988726 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473933649289 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.228373322 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.5 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199756364664 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734550716126 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471848384165 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125414100272 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398968272354 0.0667264976115 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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