Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state even if these areas could be developed for economic gain

The speaker asserts that it is essential for nations to pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state regardless of the economic potential of these areas. In my view, however, the speaker overlooks some of the possible consequences of implementing the policy.
Admittedly, the notion of preserving wilderness is reasonable to some extent as the wild areas are precious for the whole society. In the field of science, those invaluable vegetation, animals and the original geological structures are the best resources for scientific research which will probably lead to great improvements in many areas such as biology and geography. From the perspective of environmental protection, the policy can effectively ensure biological diversity and avoid air pollution caused by lack of forest and water. For the local inhabitants, the wild areas may be the ideal places for jogging and wandering, their spiritual support would be destroyed if those areas are not preserved.
However, the prerequisite of implementing the policy is that the society is already well developed. Though preserving any remaining wilderness areas is important, it should be taken into account after economic construction and infrastructure construction have reached a comparatively high standard. It is apparently irrational to protect all the wild areas and refuse to cultivate when the impoverished local people are still in hunger. It is also absurd for the local government to avoid constructing factories in order to keep the pristine land when the locality extremely need industrial development which could prompt huge economic gain. All in all, when the economic development in the locality and the basic living quality of local inhabitants are still unsatisfying, caring too much about protecting wilderness areas seems unreasonable and ridiculous.
Based on the above analysis, I believe that the crux of the matter is not whether to preserve the wild areas, but when to preserve those areas. The answer depends on the concrete analysis of concrete situations. The policy of wild area protection should be enacted exactly at the time when the locality had greatly improved its economic condition and solved most of the inhabitants’ living problems. Thus, it is essential for the nation to form a complete assessment system which decides whether the benefit of preserving any remaining wilderness areas is beyond the economic loss of giving up utilizing those areas so as to determine the best time to begin preserving wilderness areas. In that way, the nation can effectively balance the economy and environmental protection.
In sum, compared with making sweeping generalization about the correctness of passing laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, it is better to think about the local practical situations and then make a rational choice. To ensure both economic development and the preservation of wilderness areas, doing the right thing at the right moment is of vital importance.

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Average: 8.3 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...my view, however, the speaker overlooks some of the possible consequences of implementing t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 616, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...loss of giving up utilizing those areas so as to determine the best time to begin preser...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43220338983 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03741156302 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514830508475 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5823618399 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.444444444 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486544797288 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134859226826 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135770635802 0.0758088955206 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277381961012 0.150359130593 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648732068394 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...my view, however, the speaker overlooks some of the possible consequences of implementing t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 616, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...loss of giving up utilizing those areas so as to determine the best time to begin preser...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43220338983 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03741156302 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514830508475 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5823618399 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.444444444 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486544797288 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134859226826 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135770635802 0.0758088955206 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277381961012 0.150359130593 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648732068394 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.