Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In asserting that nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, the speaker fails to acknowledge that the implementation of such claims can be problematic under certain conditions. Nevertheless, I agree with the speaker only to the extent that such claims should be restricted to developed society who feels it is needful. My reasons for saying so are elucidated below.
In the above claim, it wasn’t specified weather it is private or government owned wilderness or both should be considered. Therefore, to avoid any ambiguity, I will assume the claim is to be applied to both private and government owned wilderness. Notwithstanding, either way it is considered, lot of controversies will be steered up as pointed below.
Firstly, this claim if adopted will definitely lead to annex of peoples un developed lands. Isn’t that an infringement to their right of ownership? Of course it is. Even if the government decides to take their lands in exchange for a certain amount, while some-especially those that was bequeathed the land- may yield to government demand, some who used their hard earned money to purchase the land obviously won’t concede to that. After all, at the purchase of the land, they had in mind something tangible they intend doing with the land. possibly the land is still in its wilderness state because of lack of fund to transform it.
Secondly, even when only government owned lands are considered, yielding to the above claim might be very disastrous in some society. Some countries have many of their land mass as wilderness area. Opting to leave those land mass as they are, is an alternative way of strangling development to death in that country. A typical case is Africa. In Africa many of the countries there still have more than half of their landmass un developed. The hope that those countries have in rising to the point where they can be recognized as developed countries, lies in development of those un developed wilderness areas. Hence, rather than preserve the existing wilderness area, there is high need for building infrastructures such as road, schools, train station etc that will propel development in those countries.
However, for cases where the country is developed, such as in United states, United Kingdom etc, the claim can easily be implemented. Many of such countries have used up most of their landmass in course of developing their countries. Notwithstanding, the workability of the claim depends on the values and challenges of the society under consideration. For science driven developed society such as America, who love scientific discoveries the claim will be feasible cause they will want to secure those wilderness areas for the purpose of retaining biodiversity. With this in place, scientist can easily have access to plant and animal organism for their research. In a sharp contrast, country such as Dubai although developed, might not comply with the aim. The country’s aim is to be the best tourist country. Hence, if possible, they might want to use up their whole lands. Similarly, if a developed country is challenged with issues such as global warming, the challenge might impel them to preserve the land since the trees in the wilderness- just like every other tree- has the capacity to absorb carbon dioxide- a gas responsible for global warming- What a beautiful of fighting the global warming! On the other hand, a developed society without such problems might be reluctant over preserving of their wilderness areas.
In conclusion, because of the benefits inherent in preserving wilderness, its best it is adopted. however, amidst all its benefits, only the society that values the importance of such benefits will accept it. Nevertheless, the amount of wilderness land area to be used should be considered depending on weather the society is developed or not.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. Don't use two paragraphs for introduction.
2. Don't try to argue on both side. Always try to argue against one side, like one of your essays:
http://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-issue-task-essays/people-rely-more-and-m…
3. Don't try to put a lot of examples in one argument, like in the fifth paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 638 350
No. of Characters: 3169 1500
No. of Different Words: 278 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.026 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 171 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 93 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.207 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.256 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 541, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Possibly
...ngible they intend doing with the land. possibly the land is still in its wilderness sta...
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Line 10, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ing wilderness, its best it is adopted. however, amidst all its benefits, only the soci...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'after all', 'as for', 'in conclusion', 'of course', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235127478754 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.172804532578 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0807365439093 0.0880659088768 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0354107648725 0.0497285424764 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0453257790368 0.0444667217837 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134560906516 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.056657223796 0.0406280797675 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8989324393 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0354107648725 0.030933414821 114% => OK
Particles: 0.0042492917847 0.0016655270985 255% => OK
Determiners: 0.0991501416431 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0297450424929 0.0249443105267 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014164305949 0.0148568991511 95% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3907.0 2732.02544248 143% => OK
No of words: 635.0 452.878318584 140% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15275590551 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01988110783 4.58838876751 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35905511811 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28031496063 0.280924506359 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.212598425197 0.200843997647 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154330708661 0.132149295362 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8989324393 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 219.290929204 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474015748031 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 58.9595896683 55.4138127331 106% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6194690265 155% => OK
Sentence length: 19.84375 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7997005004 59.4972553346 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.09375 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.84375 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.674092028746 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 47.875246063 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.68156424581 1.64882698954 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421576934843 0.391690518653 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120546666405 0.123202303941 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0929413551748 0.077325440228 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488061386462 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165775302598 0.149214159877 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15005025499 0.161403998019 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929903201216 0.0892212321368 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.387850042954 0.385218514788 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.100470076306 0.0692045440612 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295309480156 0.275328986314 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645657110444 0.0653680567796 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88274336283 246% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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