"Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain." Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
I partially agree with the statement that nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
When the human race entered the era of agricultural revolution, they began exploiting the wilderness at a fast rate, destroying wetlands in order to raise livestock or devastating rainforests for the sake of planting crops. Worse still, after the industrial revolution, the exploitation of remaining wilderness reached an unprecedented speed. Increasingly, wild areas are being disrupted by humans’ activities for economic gain, which has caused a large number of valuable animals and plants to perish from the earth. Also, the number of endangered animals is still decreasing at present. In order to protect these flora and fauna from extinction, nations ought to pass laws to preserve some wilderness areas so as to provide wildlife with an undisrupted environment.
However, when it comes to conserving any wilderness areas, it seems a little bit unrealistic and unnecessary. No nation can guarantee not to make use of any wild areas left over because every nation must develop intact areas for some purposes such as mining fossil fuels, reclaiming swampland for agriculture to meet increasing population’s need or even doing some experiments including missile tests. If all remaining wilderness areas within one country cannot be utilized anymore, this country is bound to be stagnant and can hardly thrive henceforth. Apart from some unreality of the first half of the statement, it may also sound needless. In some wilderness areas, there is no need to maintain them intact and slightly changing their natural state is likely to lead to favorable consequences instead of undesirable ones. For instance, in the northwest of China, there are large areas of desert in which wind-driven generators are installed, creating tremendous power for surrounding cities. Instead of using traditional methods to generate electricity, this way is more environmentally friendly in spite of transforming the surface of the desert to some extent. Thus, although nations should enact laws to preserve some wild areas, that any wild areas are under the protection of law seems unrealistic and unnecessary.
In addition, of great environmental as well as ecological value, preserving remaining wilderness areas is indeed of importance, however, it does not contradict economic interests, and a win-win situation is expected to be achieved if nations handle it appropriately. Zhangjiajie National Forest Park is an excellent example of this point. Even though changing these wild areas a little to build the park, the floral and fauna are protected perfectly. While the park is obtaining large profit through eco-tourism, tourists also gain eco-consciousness during their trip. Moreover, the government can make use of this revenue from the park to do more eco-development.
In conclusion, nations do not need to pass laws to preserve all remaining wilderness areas. On one hand, it is a little bit unrealistic. On the other hand, proper activities can make a win-win situation with respect to ecology and economics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ies for economic gain, which has caused a large number of valuable animals and plants to perish f...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this flora' or 'these florae', 'these floras'?
Suggestion: this flora; these florae; these floras
...reasing at present. In order to protect these flora and fauna from extinction, nations ough...
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Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... laws to preserve some wilderness areas so as to provide wildlife with an undisrupted en...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...erving any wilderness areas, it seems a little bit unrealistic and unnecessary. No nation ...
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Line 9, column 114, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... wilderness areas. On one hand, it is a little bit unrealistic. On the other hand, proper ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, apart from, as for, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44689378758 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09862283086 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535070140281 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 853.2 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5356262098 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.545454545 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77272727273 5.21951772744 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334230916211 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909442429846 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112942232949 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22512495602 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159254131907 0.0667264976115 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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