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Education is the key to success. Education provides awareness of different fields. The prompt recommends that in the early stage of development all students should be provided with the same level of education until they each college. In my view, I strongly agree with the author, as awareness about different fields always provides one with a variety of choices to pursue.
School is the institute which introduces fledging students with different education fields, namely, maths, science, social, language, etc. with the gradual development of knowledge in these fields students can discover more about a certain fields. In the process of this discovery, many students can recognize their passion. For example, Mark Zuckerberg, CEO of leading social networking site, Facebook, is a college dropout from Haward University, despite of being dropout he is successful in his life. He has been known as the most influential and successful person. The reason behind his success is that he got to determine the field he is passionate about in the early stage of his life, as he was always interested in computer and programming, with this discovery he created a Facebook application. Despite being college dropout he had oppurnutiy to discover the field of the computer before his college day. Perhaps, this discovery would never have been possible if he had not had studies all the compulsory subjects before college. Hence, from this we can acknowledge that the general compulsory curriculum provides opportunities for students to discover their field of passion.
In early phase of development, the human brain is unaware of many things. If the guide is not provided then one can never know the branches of science, maths, social, grammer. As we guide students with the same level of curriculum they can buid upon the challenges about life and also mantain a mesurable competation with their contempory friends.
In conclusion, providing same level of curriculum in early stage helps student to be aware about different prespective of life which otherwise would have remains auaware. Starting from early stage one would know about the competation in life with their contempories.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31700288184 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78923830882 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481268011527 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0095052693 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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