Every action has some reaction and possibly, reaction is not merely a consequence of the action. There are many ways to accomplish a task and the outcome will depend on how we carry out the task will matter the most.
In 2016, government of India passed the demonetization bill. In which, currency notes of 500 and 1000 rupees were banned. Demonetization was a shock to an Indian economy and also to the Indian citizens. Purpose of this ban was to make black money disappear but instead, common man of india and thier household suffered heavily. citizens had to go throuth the painful journey because government's lack of care and delibration while making such impetuous action. This actions resembles to the operation done on a patient without giving him anesthesia. If This decision was taken with taking various outcomes into account such as the suffering of people or the viablity of the policy then the outcome would be different.
Think of a doctor treating a patient with hurry where the doctor overlooks some of the simptoms which patient is having, patient might get more sick after the treatment. For example, patient is having dangue and doctor is treating him without checking his white cell count, patient will not feel better even after the course of medicine or worst he might die if his white cells drop below certain limits. If doctor takes a differnt approch to treat the patient then the outcome will differ.
Meriad of examples suggests that outcome of an action is not merely a consequence of an action but rather it is depending on the approch we take to perform the action. Thus how we carry out the action is what matters the most.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Citizens
...a and thier household suffered heavily. citizens had to go throuth the painful journey b...
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Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...ion while making such impetuous action. This actions resembles to the operation done...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'resemble'.
Suggestion: resemble
...ing such impetuous action. This actions resembles to the operation done on a patient with...
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Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...t with hurry where the doctor overlooks some of the simptoms which patient is having, patie...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... white cells drop below certain limits. If doctor takes a differnt approch to trea...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... consequence of an action but rather it is depending on the approch we take to perform the a...
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Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... approch we take to perform the action. Thus how we carry out the action is what mat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, thus, while, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 286.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82517482517 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4776471481 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58041958042 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 704.065955056 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2109834313 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5714285714 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231578627685 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818691911885 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109227272037 0.0758088955206 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182955268501 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157990891612 0.0667264976115 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.