Oftentimes, the results of a particular action are not of consequence; rather, it is the way we go about the action that matters most.
We frequently hear that with every task we do, it is not about the outcome, but rather the process which we experience, leading up to the end goal. Although it is rather poetic to think this way, that all is well as long as you have tried your best, I contrastingly find that this is almost never the case.
Mark Zuckerberg, founder of Facebook, notorious college dropout, is a classic example of why the results of his action matters more than the process. As the creator of one of the most powerful social media platforms, no one seemed to think twice about the way he went about to achieve his success when Facebook first surfaced. Internet users were eager to jump onto the opportunity to connect with friends across the globe, causing the website to culminate to new heights. However, what about Zuckerberg's team, who initially worked with him on this nascent idea? How many Facebook users actually bothered to think twice about exactly how Zuckerberg achieved his success?
Another more grounded example is the GRE. Who is to care about the process which the test takers endured in order to achieve a particular score on the exam? Our capability is entiringly measured by a number assigned to each person at the end of the test, and we are further assessed by graduate programs based on that same meaningless number. Apart from the writing section, the exam is purely multiple choice. Has the ETS ever thought that there might be a story behind each score? What if test takers accidentally typed in a wrong number? What if a negligible mathematical error was made at the very last minute? What if the test taker was going through personal trauma, leading to the poor performance on the test day? Still, the process is irrelevant, as we are only evaluated by the result we are able to produce.
One may argue that the actions do matter, but I tend to believe that actions only matter when the result is impressive, because only then do we begin to pay attention to these actions. Vince Gilligan, the creator of Breaking Bad, worked small jobs at publishing companies and took on small writing jobs before crafting his breakthrough television program. The show summoned millions of fans from across the globe, but who paid attention? Before he was able to produce a tangible result, it did not matter that he attended the highly prestigious Tisch School of the Arts.
Although the actions leading up to the results matter, I believe they simply serve as the stepping stone, as we frequently notice only successful results are laudable. Without the results, actions might as well be futile.
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- Oftentimes the results of a particular action are not of consequence rather it is the way we go about the action that matters most 86
- Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.Write a response in which you discuss the ext 66
- Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.Write a response in which you 83
- In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 616, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...error was made at the very last minute? What if the test taker was going through per...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82142857143 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50916289577 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564732142857 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3723802832 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1818181818 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31818181818 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294914615511 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651960188489 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709017735527 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154976855875 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497242603601 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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