Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
A nation's major cities are often the first impressions we have of the country, so naturally it is common for the government to invest in the city in order for it to thrive. We may mistakenly believe that what meets the eye is an accurate representative of the country. Major cities are good indicators of a country's power and advancement, but loses its nation's cultures along the way; therefore, if the government's aim is to preserve cultures and traditions, then giving financial support to major cities will not be effective.
Cultural traditions are frequently compromised in order to make modern advancements within the city. A country like China has over five thousand years of history, which includes its unique religious beliefs, architecture, artwork, holidays, clothes, and food. Shanghai, one of its most dominating cities, is known for its leading financial industry, impressive skylines, and eclectic people -- none of which gives any indication of China's culture. Culture is commonly found in history, but various parts of Shanghai and Beijing have torn down historic buildings to pave way to modern skylines that can compete with New York City. The financial support given to major cities is more than likely used to develop new technology that advances the country as global leaders, thereby depriving history and culture of the attention which they deserve.
Major cities are also receive uncountable numbers of immigrants yearly. As foreigners inundate the cities for better work opportunities, education, and higher standards of living, they also bring their hometown traditions with them. Global cultures begin intertwining with each other within the city, and the traditional aspects of the country can easily be misconstrued or eroded. For instance, Caribbean islands boasts residents from around the world. When you visit the islands, you will quickly find out that their vibrant community led to the celebration of every culture -- Emancipation Day, Indian Arrival Day, Shouter Baptist Day, Corpus Christi, and more. Over time, a new culture is formed, which takes into consideration immigrants and their beliefs.
Culture is more specific than simply the city itself. National holidays, foods, historical landmarks, religion, are all factors that need to be considered to gain a hollistic understanding of a country's culture. Instead of making equivocal investments in a city, where the funds can easily be used for non-cultural developments, governments will benefit more from financially supporting artwork, and promoting traditions to the public. Fortunately, smaller cities with less population movement are not as severely tampered with, and remnants of history can be found. If the central hubs of traditional culture can be identified and they are given the funds to preserve and restore history, more people will be attracted to these locations to learn about cultures.
Ultimately, if a nation's priority is to preserve traditional cultures, making financial investments in major cities is unlikely to be the solution. A major city is frequently not an accurate representation of a country's tradition, so governments are better off investing in other cultural aspects rather than the broad city.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: A nation; Nations
A nations major cities are often the first impres...
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Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'received'.
Suggestion: received
... they deserve. Major cities are also receive uncountable numbers of immigrants yearl...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...arn about cultures. Ultimately, if a nations priority is to preserve traditional cul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, as for, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2737.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4630738523 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9250526137 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538922155689 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9484931142 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316472119236 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961890365433 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712090447814 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192366500122 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505678639931 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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