The governments collect tax from its citizen ultimately redistributing for the development of the nation. Spending money on development of cities in an excellent choice, it in cities that many citizens reside so, naturally more money is needed for the benefits of metropolitan cities. The rural areas are of equal importance too, considering the rich cultural and spiritual exsitence, towns and villages cannot be neglected. So, this leads to question on how the expenditures need to distributed and which is more important?
Due to globalisation and industrialisation there is enormous demand for entrepreneurs and industrialist which is slowly push people towards modernisation. Gradually there are cultures that are lossing there uniques due to this modernisation and competition for power. For instance Shanghai, Bejing, Bengaluru which had thousands of years of tradition and cultural background today is transformed into a hightech city to challenge cities like New York, Los Angeles, etc. Innumerable historic buildings and cultural hubs are destroyed to build skyscrapers, ethnic importance is forgotten. Once culture or tradition is lost in time there no possible way of reincanating it. Hence rural cities need to be apathised with urban towns, initiatives need to be taken to preserve if the government wants to presever and burgeon the culture of the country. Recognising the tradtion by having particular day for a culture like Indians day, national holiday for festivals are ways to boost the culture.
Culture and tradition were once a bud too, so there are need to be given equal opportunity to the new tradition that can be harvested. As people migrate to cities there are different ethnic, culture and tradition in these place leading to a hybrid culture. For instance hollywood which was a poor town with corn and wheat production has now turned into a multi billion industry. people from all over the world come here to showcase their talent, this town provides stage to the talented. Likewise cities are equal importance to, you never know when they are going to bloom. the government needs to provide opportunity for the growth of talent everywhere.
To conclude, there is a need to preserve the historic tradition and culture of the nation as well as the need to provide opportunity for the growth of new talent and economy in the metropolitan cities. So the leaders need to be apathetic towards urban and rural towns. This leads to equal growth in both the places and ultimately boasts the nation's tradition and culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 121, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'pushed'.
Suggestion: pushed
...neurs and industrialist which is slowly push people towards modernisation. Gradually...
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Line 2, column 671, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ere no possible way of reincanating it. Hence rural cities need to be apathised with ...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...w turned into a multi billion industry. people from all over the world come here to sh...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...is town provides stage to the talented. Likewise cities are equal importance to, you nev...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ever know when they are going to bloom. the government needs to provide opportunity...
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Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...th the places and ultimately boasts the nations tradition and culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, likewise, so, well, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21463414634 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95972971739 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521951219512 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2268230435 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.9 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22666903218 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707158845764 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441175765608 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149851466224 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222940264978 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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