Every individual in one way or another influenced by his surrounding and also by his thinking. There is a apothem, we are the average of the five people who we surround with. This is very much true as our environment has a major impact on our character. So I agree with the authors view that people's behaviour is largely determined by the force not of their own making.
In the first sentence about individuals thinking is mainly a factor for one's behavior while this is true. The thought of a person arises usually similar to what he has experienced, often when we watch a television series or a movie or even a song that we like it is natural that we daydream about it or think about it for at least a week. Likewise when we interact with our friends and family the conversation we had with them, their attitude, their behaviour all affects us in one way or the other. To support this statement there was a study where to twins of same IQ where sent to different educational institute, one was sent to a good college the other was sent to a poor college. The result was as expected the child who enter a qualified university flourished in life while the other failed. People don't just hear they imitate actions, behaviour and character. This is one of the reason parents ask their kids to have good company.
The kind of environment drives you towards the same direction, if you through a paper into a river it is bound to flow in the path of the river ultimately reaching same destination as that of the river if not a partial path. Although this is true there maybe a some anomaly where people do not come under this section, this is very rare and is possible mainly because of one's own focus. Such people are rare and diverging all the negative and distraction from their surrounding.
To conclude it the author's idea of people's behaviour largely behaving determined by forces not of their own is true. This is summed up in the above two paragraph, every this aligned in the way one thinks which is in turn affected by his surroundings. It is rare for a person to think that is not from the environment and everyday activities. If there is nothing that is input into the mind there a barely anything new to think of.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ding and also by his thinking. There is a apothem, we are the average of the five...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...viduals thinking is mainly a factor for ones behavior while this is true. The though...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put before the verb 'arises'.
Suggestion: usually arises
...e this is true. The thought of a person arises usually similar to what he has experienced, oft...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
... or think about it for at least a week. Likewise when we interact with our friends and f...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... in life while the other failed. People dont just hear they imitate actions, behavio...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... their surrounding. To conclude it the authors idea of peoples behaviour largely behav...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'paragraph' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'paragraphs'.
Suggestion: paragraphs
...rue. This is summed up in the above two paragraph, every this aligned in the way one thin...
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Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he environment and everyday activities. If there is nothing that is input into the...
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Message: You used an adverb ('barely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('anything') instead of another adjective.
...thing that is input into the mind there a barely anything new to think of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, likewise, may, so, while, at least, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4802955665 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56300760508 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0813446745 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.055555556 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174000186965 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544223396345 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655342421605 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107770841941 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234369889186 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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