The rate at which humans are developing, advancing and pushing the boundaries of technology is incredibly rapid. We only need to look at the advancement of mobile phones in the past forty years to recognise that phones are getting smarter, smaller and more powerful every year. For instance, a comparison of the first iPhone in 2007 to the current iPhone 7 reveals that humans now have a wealth of information and capabilities at our fingertips that would have been inconceivable only ten years earlier. This gives rise to the question: are we trading off our intelligence in the face of technological advancements? This depends entirely on how you define intelligence. Naturally, we are becoming increasingly reliant on technology to perform basic problem solving tasks, simply for the purpose of convenience. For example, we no longer need to spend time browsing large books of maps to figure out how to get from point A to point B when an app or website can perform that task in mere seconds. In terms of base level problem solving, then it is entirely possible that humans are at risk of losing the ability to think for ourselves. However, technology is more than just an app, and intelligence is more than the ability to perform basic tasks. As this essay will argue, technology also plays a significant role in developing, expanding and nurturing human intelligence on a more complex level.
The advancement of technology is not natural. It is not a process of evolution, where progress occurs purely because there is a need for it. Rather, the development of technology is contingent on the development of human capabilities. Without the advancement in technological research, there would be no technological progress. As such, it is necessary that humans develop the skills and abilities required to advance technology further. For example, cars have become increasingly safer in the past twenty years, but solely because engineers and mechanics have created new safety technology to pave the way for safer vehicles. Features like ABS brakes, airbags and power steering have arisen from engineers responding with research and development to the desperate need for humans to have safer vehicles that can brake safely, withstand high impacts and swerve easily under pressure. Without this human response to a complex problem, cars would not have naturally evolved on their own accord. Further to this, with the advancements of technology humans are adapting their skills to ensure that they can keep up with the advancements. Fifty years ago, there was no need for people to know how to type on a standard QWERTY keyboard. However, now it is an essential skill that is taught to children at a young age to ensure that they know how to use computers for their study and play. Comparatively, an 18 year old student is extremely likely to have better typing skills than a baby boomer who is an experienced professional. So although the general population isn't involved in the research and development like those in the engineering or IT industries, it is still necessary for them to curate new skills in order to engage with technology.
Beyond enabling humans to solve basic problems, technology allows humans to access information, people and material that was previously inaccessible. With a simple touch of a button, we can now contact people across the world with apps like WhatsApp or Skype; we can also search, find and open a wide array of texts, and even translate ancient texts with powerful search engines like Google and online libraries like Wiley; online communities powered through websites like Reddit or Facebook allow people to connect like they never have before. In this manner connective technology has extended the reach of humans to unimaginable lengths. By broadening social or academic domains, technology empowers people to access and use new material, provoking cross-cultural discussions and developments. For instance, it is common practice for academics from universities across the world to co-publish papers in two or more languages by using technology like Google Docs or Dropbox. By promoting such access, technology provokes and fosters a different kind of intelligence to problem solving, that is more creative and thought provoking. Humans are becoming more creative, challenging boundaries of language, time and space that previously prevented actions like co-publishing academic papers.
In conclusion, it is naïve to believe that technology is limiting human intelligence. While it is possible, and even true, that humans are becoming more reliant on technology to solve basic every day problems like calculations, technology simultaneously empowers humans to develop and curate new skills. By forcing humans to develop skills to keep up with technology and fostering new ways of accessing information, technology has a integral role in nurturing human intelligence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 124.0 58.6224719101 212% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4136.0 2235.4752809 185% => OK
No of words: 786.0 442.535393258 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26208651399 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.29487408139 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98151626398 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 379.0 215.323595506 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482188295165 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1328.4 704.065955056 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6900642117 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57575757576 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232843167001 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655924970118 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034918049901 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14964233048 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228274831632 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 207.0 100.480337079 206% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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