As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The world today runs on technology. From setting an alarm in our cell-phones every night to operating massive machinery in space tech programs, technology has become an integral part in every sphere of human activity. The third industrial revolution to take place in the world, after the huge waves created by the steam engine and electricity was the invention of computers and robotics. And the world has never been the same since then. Tech companies have grown by leaps and bounds and some of the most brilliant inventors of our time head the largest tech corporations in the world. The demand for tech has been endless and has involved a continuous stream of innovation and upgradation – we have evolved from using beeping pagers to the most basic Nokia mobile phones and now using FaceTime on the iPhone. What’s more, there are no signs of slowing down any soon.
The single most important reason for the massive success of technology is the fact that it has made life easier and more manageable. Not only can technology solve the big problems like launching rockets into space but can also be used at the grass-root level to educate a village. Growth rates of economies have risen like never before and countries that have invested in developing technological infrastructure have reaped the rewards. While we are dependent on technology, we have also greatly benefited from it. Be it a calculator, estimating the weather, navigating in a new town, we use technology every single day in one form or other to simplify life and become more productive.
While some may argue that technology has made us overly dependent that it has adversely affected us I agree to it only to an extent. It is true, excessively indulging in tech platforms such as social media has been proven to be a significant cause of depression in adolescents. Facilities like online delivery that are a click away have resulted to a sedentary lifestyle, the debilitating health impacts from sitting in front of a computer for hours and getting little physical activity and natural sunlight are all a cause of concern.
However, I believe this does not necessarily imply that reliance on technology will deteriorate man’s ability to think for himself. This is simply because at the end of the day, technology cannot replace man’s brain. Technology works brilliantly as long as it has a database - consider a doctor who encounters a disease that has never been seen before, or a problem of conserving a new-found species. There are many instances when human beings have to think out of the box. Technology is not able to accomplish this. Most importantly, humans are characterised by their ability to empathise and a fear of death and a will for survival which has propelled mankind from the Stone Age to today. We cannot program these emotions via technology. The need for human emotion and presence of mind will always overpower all of technology’s capabilities and hence I do not agree that as people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 686, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mplify life and become more productive. While some may argue that technology has made...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, third, while, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97514340344 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84883460962 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55258126195 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4846985691 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.130434783 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7391304348 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249153604983 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613353880604 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977815629328 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135120284277 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113550411444 0.0667264976115 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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