An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The international development organization has recommended the government to promote the cultivation of a new breed of millet that is high in vitamin A in Tagus. The reason stated for this recommendation is the observed deficiency in vitamin A among the people of this impoverished nation. The organization also recommends that subsidies be paid to farmers for cultivating this otherwise costly type of millet.
However, before this recommendation is followed through, the concerned authorities must assess this situation from several angles.
First, one needs to look at the sample size of the respondents who underwent the vitamin test. It could be that the deficiency is specific to only a certain part of the country. In that case one need not intervene in cultivation choices and patterns of farmers across the country.
Further, paying subsidies to the farmers for this type of millet cultivation may not be feasible or fiscally prudent for the government given its other subsidy programs and farmer protection schemes. Also, cultivation of this new variety of millet might not only incur increased cost of seeds, but also incur more costs for resources like machinery, labour, fertilizers and pesticides. Hence, even if the cost of seeds were to be covered by the subsidy, a farmer simply may not be able to afford the increased costs of other resources.
Further, the organization does not seem to have provided any information on the other effects of consuming this variety of millet. While it may improve the concentration of vitamin A and cure the people of Tagus of their vitamin A deficiency, it might also result in excesses or deficiencies of other vital nutrients or perhaps its consumption might not be suitable given the climate of the region. Such effects can in fact be detrimental to people's health. Hence, emphasizing and promoting the inclusion of the new type of millet in people's diet might actually push them towards other possible ailments.
The organization also takes it for granted that people will readily adopt the new variety simply because it is already a staple food in the region. However, people's dietary tastes can never be assumed to be a certain way and it might be the case that they do not find this millet palatable at all.
Finally, the organization must also consider whether there are alternate and more cost-efective ways to tackle the deficiency of vitamin A that also take all the abovementioned aspects of the problem into account, or else following through with the recommendation is not likely to have the predicted result.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12765957447 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93006716784 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491725768322 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7236066237 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.588235294 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426306216494 0.243740707755 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133945636004 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086653179592 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188077250432 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135485430426 0.0667264976115 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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