As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Technology development becomes faster and faster, and people rely more and more on technology to solve problems. Some people worry that we will lose our ability to think for ourselves since everything looks that can be solved by technology. However, I do not agree with this opinion. Although technology brings some problems, the advantages we can get from technology development are much more than problems and the ability of humans to think for themselves are primarily depends on if they want to think and if they want to develop their abilities.
Technology do bring some problems. Technology development and commercial globalization bring conflicts between different cultures and races. For example, the trade war happens between China and the united states. The trade wars affect not only two governments but all citizens in these two countries including huge numbers of companies. Also, many other countries are affected by the tense relationship between China and the United States. Technology development also affects our environment. The invitation of plastic bags makes people’s life convenient but result in serious plastic pollution everywhere on the earth. Today, we even can find plastic material in the deepest sea and in human bodies.
However, most every progress in our life is because of technology development. Many years ago, we only can send mails by pigeons but now we can send emails or text messages which only takes less than one second. In the past, we can only travel on foot or by riding horses, then we can take trains, cars, and planes. Every improvement in clothes, food, housing and transportation which are essential parts in our life is from technology development. Also because of technology development, we are healthier than before. We have more advanced medical treatment and we do not need to worry about our lives every second, so we can live longer. All these elements are the basis for people to have the ability to think for themselves, if we are still worried about daily lives, how can we develop our abilities. Technology gives our chances to thinks more and to have more. If people will think for themselves actually depends on if people want to think for themselves. If the person is lazy and does not want to think, even in a bad environment, he still does not think for himself. By contrast, people who would like to think and study will always do these no matter what the environment is.
Technology cannot solve every problem that people face, and it is only the tool that people develop. If we have problems like becoming lazy and stopping thinking, the first thing should do is to reflect ourselves instead of blaming technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 450, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ur life is from technology development. Also because of technology development, we a...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...selves instead of blaming technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, still, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06711409396 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70632677543 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496644295302 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3899724609 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340736881938 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100966581523 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114526346531 0.0758088955206 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217612118056 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152733852864 0.0667264976115 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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