People's behavior is largely determined by the forces not their own making.
People's behavior is largely determined by the external world, generally speaking, I agree with this viewpoint. Because we live in different social groups and are influenced all the time, so these interactions with the external world determine our behaviors unconsciously. However, not absolute, we still have our own freedom to decide some of our behaviors.
When staying in danger, people's actions are decided more by the internal physical process immediately. However, here we are talking more about the social behaviors in the daily life. First of all, once one is born in this world, his/ her nationality is verified already, which decides the culture backgrounds where he/ she will live in for a such long time later. The cultural circumstance will influence people's view of value to much extent and thus determine one's behavior. For instance, Chinese are usually thought to be shy comparaed with Ameican in social activities. Also, citizen's in northern Europe have comparatively fixed circle of friends while American like to meet and know more people in their life. Thus, this kind of influence is unconsciously and not made by one's own.
Moreover, the education system also plays a key role in the influence on people's behavior. In China, high school students are most of time trained to solve the problems in their textbooks. This kind of mechanical and standard teaching method makes the high school students be good at memorizing and preparing for the exams. However, it also leads to that they are worse at cooperation in a team when compared with the Europeans, since the educational system there is more team work oriented. Chinese students are more like a lonely soldier.
Furthermore, in this media intensive time, the press is also a important role which determines citizen's social awareness and thus behaviors. Nowadays, with the development of soical media, more and more heroes from normal people are getting to be known by us. The brave firman who sacrificed his own life for saving others, the nurse helps patients in COVID-19. All the advertisements arise our awareness of love and self-sacrifice in the contemporary time.
However, not absolute, we are sill the driver of our life even though we cannot live outside social groups. In the process of self-explorsion, we just keep asking ourselves "Who am I?""Where I wanna go?". We still have chance to make our own decision for the life we want with the improvement of our cognitive level towards the world. We could build our own social groups where we play the essential role and behave ourselves, such as family.
To sum up, people's behavior is largely influenced and decided by the external factors other than themselves. However, we still have chance to make our own decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for instance, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14757709251 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83936083629 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539647577093 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3811153403 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.48 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.16 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228769781267 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667266857526 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652870546923 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136524480769 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718170744733 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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