People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The speaker asserts that people’s behavior is determined by forces. There are some kinds of people who are determined only by their own making without influence by forces; However, these people are the minority in the world. In my point of view, family, peer pressure, and society can be kinds of force, which has a considerable effect on people’s behavior. Therefore, I strongly agree with the speaker.
To begin with, the family affects our hobby, choice of vocation, and value system; People imitate their parent’s behavior, and they are eager to follow their parents’ occupation. For example, if their parents are doctors, they are more likely to be a doctor as well in the future; With parents’ assistance, children can follow their way in life, fulfilling them to facilitate career development in the future. As in the process of learning to value systems and skill development, parents also play a crucial role; For ensuring that children can form a positive value system, parents have to point out the negative behavior. In sum, people’s behavior is affected by family.
Secondly, peer pressure influences our choice, for mainstream influences our behavior overwhelmingly, including study, vocation, and hobby. When studying at school, students stay with others for a long time. Due to getting along with classmates for a long time, students’ behavior is affected by each other; For instance, When students applied the major in the university, peer’s decision will affect their choice, forcing them to choose the same major. In a word, people’s behavior is influenced by peers easily.
Finally, society influences people’s behavior, because the law and culture also influence our behavior and choice. Living in the country, people have to follow the law, and culture of the country; And the country’s law causes a restriction on people. In some countries, people could not express their opinion, because their country have no freedom of speech; Whereas in other countries having freedom of speech, people can express their opinion without any restrictions. In brief, society affects people’s behavior.
To sum up, family, peer pressure, and society influence people’s behavior. As a result, I agree with what the speaker says.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in brief, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37254901961 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76023949661 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532212885154 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 68.840507204 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.555555556 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193745893573 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747893756756 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337531971122 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117706842831 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512218855706 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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