People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.

The prompt recommends that those one who make decisions emotionally and justify it logically afterwards are poor decision makers. In my opinion,I strongly agrees with this statement and argue that decisions infact decisions should be based on logic and inference rather than swaying in emotions for three reasons.

To begin, logic is the only capacity that made us humans superior to other species. If applied properly logic always leads to right conclusion. But the emotion can sometime lead to fallacious decisions. For example, If once one had a certain savings for his emergency and while on an motorbike expo he saw his dream bike, then in the gush of passion, he immediately bought it with that emergency fund. And when the disaster came in his house that his mother got seriously ill and everyone blamed him, he justified by saying I bought it was 10% cheaper at expo. The above example illustrates that the decision directed by emotion and post justification of logic is example of poor decision making.

Further, the act of justifying the emotion based decision itself shows the irrationality of such person. For example, if a person bought a land in swampy land for purpose of building house, and when condemned for buying land for making house in a place which is more precarious to earthquake, he defends by telling it was because this land is sacred and pious according to brahmans. Thus adhering to justification with logic than accepting the mistake itself proves that such are poor decision makers.

Of course, some argue that if we live all by logic and ignore our emotions then can we be happy? However in the long run decision based logic rather than emotions leads to long lasting happiness. Thus making most of the brain is the gateway to happiness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, thus, while, for example, of course, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 300.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58881354206 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556666666667 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7764969853 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425058452483 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159133044403 0.0831039109588 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169857161628 0.0758088955206 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286800996161 0.150359130593 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17199967735 0.0667264976115 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, thus, while, for example, of course, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: