The powerful are most respected not when they exercise their power but when they refrain from exercising it
Write an essay in which you develop and support a position on the statement above. In writing your essay, you should consider both when the statement may be true and when it may be false.
Powerful, by definition, is the ability to exert potency and influence. Some people will argue that the powerful are most respected when they exercise their power like raising swords and giving death penalty to criminals but others will say that the powerful are respected when they avoid exercising it, like granting armnesty to criminal. After weighting the evidence, it is certain that the powerful are most respected when they exercise their not when they refrain from exercising it. People will have no regards for others and law because there is no person in power to penalize them disobeying.
People who argue that the powerful are most respected when they refrain from exercising their powers might point to how the former President of Nigeria, Alhaji Musa Yar' adua handled the Niger Delta militant who were destroying oil pipes. He granted them armnesty, scholarships and business funds to keep them busy because of course, the idle mind is the devil's workshop. Prior to the armnesty, military personnel were deployed to the Niger Delta region to protect lives, properties and arrest any suspects. During their time in jail, there must have been moments of remorse and wishes for a second chance. So then the armnesty came it was like the second chance they have always wanted. Now they won't repeat the crime they committed because they know they may be arrested again and this time there might not be a second chance. Thus, the powerful are most respected when they exercise their power not when they restrain from exercising it.
For over 5 years Boko Haram terrorized Nigeria with continues bomb blasts. The crisis continued for a long period of time because the then President believed in discussing on how to resolve matters rather than taking actions to ensure order in the country. Meanwhile, the Boko Harams could barely understand English so they can't express their demands or bargain on what should be done for them to stop terrorizing the nation. When the next president was elected he trained more soldiers and deployed them to the Boko Haram zones. Within a year the Boko Harams were over powered. Their leaders were killed and their camps destroyed. The few that were remaining were compelled to surrender and again peace and harmony was restored in the country. This shows that the poweful are not respected when they withhold their power but when they exercise it.
In conclusion it is clear that the powerful are most respected when they exercise their power not when they refrain from exercising it. Overpowering the Boko Harams by deploying well trained and equipped soldiers to strategic location all over the country, killing their leaders and destroying their camps shows that power is respected when it is exercised not when it is withheld. If anything, withholding power serves only as a contrast so that we can understand what respect for power really is.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...blasts. The crisis continued for a long period of time because the then President believed in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...could barely understand English so they cant express their demands or bargain on wha...
^^^^
Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...leaders and destroying their camps shows that power is respected when it is exerc...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, second, so, then, thus, well, while, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01659751037 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37988057381 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477178423237 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9218802775 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.909090909 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393308176489 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138730618352 0.0831039109588 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171617448889 0.0758088955206 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298624919254 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923351100703 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...blasts. The crisis continued for a long period of time because the then President believed in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...could barely understand English so they cant express their demands or bargain on wha...
^^^^
Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...leaders and destroying their camps shows that power is respected when it is exerc...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, second, so, then, thus, well, while, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01659751037 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37988057381 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477178423237 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9218802775 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.909090909 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393308176489 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138730618352 0.0831039109588 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171617448889 0.0758088955206 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298624919254 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923351100703 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.