The primary goal of education is to get a job
Humans are born into this world with a malleable mind. it can be bent and formed into any new image, good or bad. In Japan, children spend early years in their education grasping manners and tact. they are taught how to behave in civilized society. Then only, they believe students are able to reach new heights in their careers, because a person should know how to behave like a 'person'.
In this world of constant competition, some are inclined to believe that the primary purpose for education is to get a job. as it has become a dogma that a person needs good education if he/she needs a job and wants to make a living. it is absolutely true that through education one imbibes the skills required for getting a job. Nowadays, people try to get into ivy league prestigious universities just to get a good job which pays well, but that education does more than that, even though it is purely vocational.
But education cannot be defined as just a tool to get a job. there is a lot more to that. The very definition of education states it is an acquisition of skills, values, beliefs and habits. These are the catalysts to facilitate the most complex chemical reaction in the universe known as life! education isn't education, it is just an instruction if it's purpose is to just get a job, but by experience we know it is not. Of course, people get the job of their dreams equipped with education, but the underlying education makes them humble and sane.
Like mentioned before the highly moldable minds of children are affected by the education they receive. there is goodness and kindness in people because of the values and morals inculcated in them through education, may it be received from school or from parents. The education is the hammer that forges the better people whom the old can entrust the future to. education is far more than just some manual, it is how a noble human is made.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, well, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62536873156 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49513933026 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525073746313 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3167201757 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1111111111 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364834239778 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113404428262 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113033654288 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213489866761 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158343890808 0.0667264976115 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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