Claim: Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primary in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
major cities in any nation are the backbone of its economy. they contribute to it through tourism, trade and foreign investment. these metropolitan cities attract much attention worldwide, and thus to keep the progress up, it's necessary for them to receive the financial support needed to flourish.
Although these cities are important, it's not entirely true that the nation's culture and traditions are preserved in these cities. The new York city is the best example of the above - a large number of cultures from all over the world thrive there because of the worldwide exposure to business and availability of jobs in various sectors. We can see american culture as well as many other cultures living in harmony and forming a new hybrid culture.
On the contrary, the culture of the nation is mainly preserved in the villages, since they are not prone to exposure from businesses but possibly prone to the exposure from tourism, which is the fruit of the preserved culture. many examples of the same could be found in many Indian villages where the ancient culture is preserved through unique arts and crafts, architectural styles, cooking styles etc. , which cannot be found in major cities such as Mumbai or Delhi. tourism in these places would thrive if the indigenous populace doesn't migrate due to deficiencies caused by the lack of proper funding.
The reason can be disagreed upon, because as stated above, the remote and untouched villages and places play a more crucial role in conserving the culture of the nation. According to the claim, major cities must receive the financial aid as it is necessary for the progress of the nation, but these villages should also receive the necessary funding creating jobs and enabling the populace to preserve the culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Major
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Suggestion: They
...nation are the backbone of its economy. they contribute to it through tourism, trade...
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Suggestion: These
... tourism, trade and foreign investment. these metropolitan cities attract much attent...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... Although these cities are important, its not entirely true that the nations cult...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...portant, its not entirely true that the nations culture and traditions are preserved in...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...city is the best example of the above - a large number of cultures from all over the world thrive...
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Suggestion: Many
... is the fruit of the preserved culture. many examples of the same could be found in ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rchitectural styles, cooking styles etc. , which cannot be found in major cities s...
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Suggestion: Tourism
...n major cities such as Mumbai or Delhi. tourism in these places would thrive if the ind...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...would thrive if the indigenous populace doesnt migrate due to deficiencies caused by t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, well, such as, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 294.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07482993197 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55472427929 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551020408163 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4172988473 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320261328589 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10955986555 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648880664199 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191624920917 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368445381386 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.