Claim: Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primary in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Day by day as we are getting more urbaninsed and more people from the rural sections of the society are getting shift to cities. Cities in these times accomodate a large population that need to be properly facilitated. Cities these days require a more financial support than ever as proposed in the claim. All the proper functioning of cities require a lot of money provided by the government. But the reason presented is not that much compelling as it need to be for the cities to thrive. Cultural traditions are a part of our socities and require a financial help but there also some other more compelling reasons for the government to invest it's money in the cities like Schools, Maintainence of yearly water and sewage supply, and the improvement of infrastructures in the cities.
Considering at first, take the example of various aspects of the cities which are really important for the thriving of cities like Schools, Maintainence work and new constructon projects. These aspects are more valuable for the cities to thrive because the schools are needed by the children of the residents of the cities for education. Repairing of water and sewage is important beacuse it is regularly used and the new projects are important for the development to take place in the city. These are the fundamental things that a city require on regular basis.
On the other hand, take the example of cultural traditions. These are important for the society too but these factors are not important for the residents on their daily basis. Cultural traditions are a part of our history and in a way part of us. These traditions help us define who we are and distinguish us from the rest of the world. But these traditions are not the factor that affect our life on small scale or daily life. Investing the money in thses type of steps would consequently lead to misuse of our governmental fund.
All in all, I would like to conclude that government fund is really important and therefore it's our duty that it is getting used in every best possible way. Investing the fund of government on cultural traditions is not that much important as to invest it for the betterment of the life of the peolple in the cities. I agree with the claim presented but not with the reason supporting it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...t. But the reason presented is not that much compelling as it need to be for the cit...
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Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... fund is really important and therefore its our duty that it is getting used in eve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, so, therefore, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75757575758 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69986225544 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419191919192 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6223498948 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1578947368 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221868195567 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783004841762 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619621252171 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135847041505 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604426515666 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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