Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problem in a way that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Life is not simple and full of tracks of ups and down. People often judge each other about anything. Some of them people take that judgement as reason to improve their weakness and some take the same thing as a insult. A lot of scandals take place all around us in everyday life. Even in some of them, we are the making that jaudgement and in some we are the one on which that judgement was done. The claim suggest that insulting someone is sometimes useful because it draws attention in such a way that nobody else can do.
At the begining, consider the example of the big Techgiant "Ravindra Kumar". During his college days, he was very silent and introvert type of person. One day in the class, he was very much insulted by his Professor and felt preety much insulted. He went to his hostel room that day sobbing all the way. He was feeling insulted and when he reached his room, he analyzed the whole situation and felt that he need to improve his weakness to such a level that nobody can taunt him ever again. Now, is the day when the complete world recognises him as the "Perfect Dude". So, seen in this example many times taunts do work as reason to improve yourself because it draws your attention very fast.
On the contrary, consider the example of Shyam Mehta, the only son of the owner of Tata Insdustries. A similar type of event occured with Shyam but he acted after that in a very different manner. He does the complete opposite of what the Ravindra had done. Instead of taking the insult as reason to improve himself, he take that reason for granted and start feeling that he is limited in his capabilities. That he can't do anything good in his life and that he is born to be like this. His father tried to counselled him but nothing worked out. Finally, felling oppressed from a lot of time he comitted suicide.
Putting it all together, I would like to conclude that scandals are useful and help to draw our attention to our weakness. But, this also depends upon the person on which it is acted or meant to be. Some take the same reason a motive of their life to succeed in life and some like Shyam go for the opposite path. I think these scandals are useful but not in all cases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eakness and some take the same thing as a insult. A lot of scandals take place al...
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Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...hich that judgement was done. The claim suggest that insulting someone is sometimes use...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...insult as reason to improve himself, he take that reason for granted and start feeli...
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Line 5, column 415, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...is limited in his capabilities. That he cant do anything good in his life and that h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, i think, in all cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44743276284 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34208134322 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503667481663 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9210685104 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.7916666667 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0416666667 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0872047662537 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.028226000349 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558322215191 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0645019499628 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513759038145 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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